First Story, written a year ago

boner4u · 07-03-2012, 10:26 PM

This is a story I wrote a long time ago, and I figured I'd see what y'all thought about it:

Jenny jolted awake, sweat dripping off her body, soaking the blankets she wrapped herself in while tossing and turning and struggling in the night. Haunting her, the dream come back, echoing from her past. She had been free of it for years, but now, she was having the impossible images floating through her mind every night.

Jenny was 5'11, about 150 pounds. She had long legs, dark hair cut in a short, choppy punk way, and a her breasts were succulent and firm. She was 23 years old, and she first had the dream when she was 18. After having it every night for a year, it stopped, and now it was back.

The dream always started inocently, with her going about her day, and then she would open a door and walk into a room. Inside the room there was always a sofa and a chair, and He was always tied to the chair, blindfolded. She had gone to highschool with Him. Brad had been in her grade since jr high. Now, he was strapped to a chair.

Jenny slowly crept towards the chair, staring at Brad's scarred, muscled torso. she bent over, dissapointed that the blindfold kept Brad from starring down her loose halter top, and put her lips by his ear.

"Brad," she whispered, "do you know who I am?"

"you're voice, I know you, don't I?"

"yes Brad, you know me. You sit behind me in class." her soft, moist lips were so close to his ear, he could feel her breath as she whispered, "I know that you look at my ass all day. I know you glance down my shirt every chance you get. The only thing I don't know is which hole you want to fuck first."

Jenny opened her mouth, and bit Brad's ear, tugging at his earlobe with her teeth.

"Whats funny Brad, is that you don't know that I want you to fuck me. and you have no idea about all the dirty, nasty, things I want to do to you."

Jenny slid her tounge around the back of Brad's ear, nipping the top of his ear, then grabbing his head, and pressing his face against hers. Their lips parted, and thier tounges met in each other's mouths.

Jenny bit Brad's neck, then his collarbone. She could feel her pussy tingling, moistening with each kiss, with each moan, with each moan. Jenny wrapped her fingers in his hair, and pulled his mouth to her breasts.

"Oh, yes, suck on my boobs, Brad, suck them like you would suck on my clit."
Jenny ripped her halter top and bra off, throwing them to the floor

Brad sucked and bit her nipples. His tounge swirling around her soft skin as his teeth dug into her. Jenny undid her jeans, and kicked them off. Mounting Brad, she straddled him in the chair, wrapping her arms around him and kissing him. Sucking his tounge into her mouth, she rubbed it with her own and bit his lips playfully, teasing him. She stood up, her naked pussy inches from his face. Her sweet juices dripped from her pussy onto Brad - onto his chest, his thighs, his neck. Jenny wiped a finger over her dripping pussy, and rested it on Brads lips. She could the taste drove him wild. She could see his cock stiffening, and the viens in his neck throbbing as his heart beat harder, and harder, and faster. Leaning forward, Jenny ground her wet pussy against his mouth. His tounge snaked out, flexing inside her. Pins and needles stabbed into her back as his lips groped her pussy, his tounge writhing inside her. She could feel her heart beating faster as he licked her. Jenny's hands strayed to his hard, thick cock, and she stroked it as he ate her. She could Brad's moaning as she stroked his cock.

Her pussy was so wet, Brads face was covered in the juices, her clit was so hard, so hot. she was burning up with desire for his cock. She wanted it inside her, stretching her, pounding against her insides and fucking her senseless. But no matter how badly she wanted to mount him and thrust the cock deep into her tight pussy, there was something else Jenny longed to do. She stroked his cock faster, and lowered her head. her tounge cupping his balls. Jenny's hands were soon covered with precum, and her pussy was producing a steady flow of her sweet juice. she stroked him faster, harder, her tounge dragging up his shaft as she jerked him off. she engulfed the head of his cock in her mouth, squeezing it with her lips.

"Oh, Fuck, yes, oh yes, I'm gonna cum."

Jenny opened her mouth, pulling it away as she stared at his chest. Brad's chest was muscular, and she found the patch of hair on it so masculine, even now, drenched in the wetness from her pussy. Brads body jerked, as a spurt of precum shot from his cock, spraying onto his torso. Jenny grinned, jerking him harder, faster, bending his cock back. Brad shuddered as ropy jets of cum shot out of his hard, throbbing cock, splattering against his chest. He came again, and again, load after load of hot, white, sticky cum coating his chest, rolling down it.

Jenny straddled him, grinding her pussy against Brads hips. She could feel his cock, it hadn't gone soft at all, and felt harder than ever. Jenny kissed his chest, his nipples, biting his stomach, licking the hot cum off his skin, moaning as her hips ground against him. her tounge running up his wet, sticky and slick body, biting him every chance she could.

She stood up, and grabbed the back of the chair, pulling it down, leaving Brad tied up, blindfolded, his cock throbbing, his chest covered in her juices, her saliva, and his cum. Jenny stepped forward, squating down, sitting on his face.

"Lick it Brad, lick my pussy, make me cum baby."

snowleopard3200 · 07-04-2012, 12:53 AM

Not bad for a first story, it has potential yet you may want to consider flushing out the characters a bit more, along with the actions. Focus on the sensations and sensuality each has, plus how they pick up on it from their partner.

I give this one a thumbs up.

boner4u · 07-04-2012, 07:46 PM

Thanks SnowLeopard!

I agree, this wasn't supposed to be an in depth novella. It was written in about five minutes for a long distance ladyfriend (she knew I'd be sharring it with others, so theres no problems with posting it here) to keep her satisfied when we couldn't skype.

I don't know if I'll re-write it, so much as if I keep writing this kind of stuff, I may recycle the plot for something new...

07-03-2012, 10:26 PM	#1
boner4u Amateur Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 95	First Story, written a year ago This is a story I wrote a long time ago, and I figured I'd see what y'all thought about it: Jenny jolted awake, sweat dripping off her body, soaking the blankets she wrapped herself in while tossing and turning and struggling in the night. Haunting her, the dream come back, echoing from her past. She had been free of it for years, but now, she was having the impossible images floating through her mind every night. Jenny was 5'11, about 150 pounds. She had long legs, dark hair cut in a short, choppy punk way, and a her breasts were succulent and firm. She was 23 years old, and she first had the dream when she was 18. After having it every night for a year, it stopped, and now it was back. The dream always started inocently, with her going about her day, and then she would open a door and walk into a room. Inside the room there was always a sofa and a chair, and He was always tied to the chair, blindfolded. She had gone to highschool with Him. Brad had been in her grade since jr high. Now, he was strapped to a chair. Jenny slowly crept towards the chair, staring at Brad's scarred, muscled torso. she bent over, dissapointed that the blindfold kept Brad from starring down her loose halter top, and put her lips by his ear. "Brad," she whispered, "do you know who I am?" "you're voice, I know you, don't I?" "yes Brad, you know me. You sit behind me in class." her soft, moist lips were so close to his ear, he could feel her breath as she whispered, "I know that you look at my ass all day. I know you glance down my shirt every chance you get. The only thing I don't know is which hole you want to fuck first." Jenny opened her mouth, and bit Brad's ear, tugging at his earlobe with her teeth. "Whats funny Brad, is that you don't know that I want you to fuck me. and you have no idea about all the dirty, nasty, things I want to do to you." Jenny slid her tounge around the back of Brad's ear, nipping the top of his ear, then grabbing his head, and pressing his face against hers. Their lips parted, and thier tounges met in each other's mouths. Jenny bit Brad's neck, then his collarbone. She could feel her pussy tingling, moistening with each kiss, with each moan, with each moan. Jenny wrapped her fingers in his hair, and pulled his mouth to her breasts. "Oh, yes, suck on my boobs, Brad, suck them like you would suck on my clit." Jenny ripped her halter top and bra off, throwing them to the floor Brad sucked and bit her nipples. His tounge swirling around her soft skin as his teeth dug into her. Jenny undid her jeans, and kicked them off. Mounting Brad, she straddled him in the chair, wrapping her arms around him and kissing him. Sucking his tounge into her mouth, she rubbed it with her own and bit his lips playfully, teasing him. She stood up, her naked pussy inches from his face. Her sweet juices dripped from her pussy onto Brad - onto his chest, his thighs, his neck. Jenny wiped a finger over her dripping pussy, and rested it on Brads lips. She could the taste drove him wild. She could see his cock stiffening, and the viens in his neck throbbing as his heart beat harder, and harder, and faster. Leaning forward, Jenny ground her wet pussy against his mouth. His tounge snaked out, flexing inside her. Pins and needles stabbed into her back as his lips groped her pussy, his tounge writhing inside her. She could feel her heart beating faster as he licked her. Jenny's hands strayed to his hard, thick cock, and she stroked it as he ate her. She could Brad's moaning as she stroked his cock. Her pussy was so wet, Brads face was covered in the juices, her clit was so hard, so hot. she was burning up with desire for his cock. She wanted it inside her, stretching her, pounding against her insides and fucking her senseless. But no matter how badly she wanted to mount him and thrust the cock deep into her tight pussy, there was something else Jenny longed to do. She stroked his cock faster, and lowered her head. her tounge cupping his balls. Jenny's hands were soon covered with precum, and her pussy was producing a steady flow of her sweet juice. she stroked him faster, harder, her tounge dragging up his shaft as she jerked him off. she engulfed the head of his cock in her mouth, squeezing it with her lips. "Oh, Fuck, yes, oh yes, I'm gonna cum." Jenny opened her mouth, pulling it away as she stared at his chest. Brad's chest was muscular, and she found the patch of hair on it so masculine, even now, drenched in the wetness from her pussy. Brads body jerked, as a spurt of precum shot from his cock, spraying onto his torso. Jenny grinned, jerking him harder, faster, bending his cock back. Brad shuddered as ropy jets of cum shot out of his hard, throbbing cock, splattering against his chest. He came again, and again, load after load of hot, white, sticky cum coating his chest, rolling down it. Jenny straddled him, grinding her pussy against Brads hips. She could feel his cock, it hadn't gone soft at all, and felt harder than ever. Jenny kissed his chest, his nipples, biting his stomach, licking the hot cum off his skin, moaning as her hips ground against him. her tounge running up his wet, sticky and slick body, biting him every chance she could. She stood up, and grabbed the back of the chair, pulling it down, leaving Brad tied up, blindfolded, his cock throbbing, his chest covered in her juices, her saliva, and his cum. Jenny stepped forward, squating down, sitting on his face. "Lick it Brad, lick my pussy, make me cum baby."

07-04-2012, 12:53 AM	#2
snowleopard3200 Guardian of the Snow Join Date: Jan 2008 Posts: 3,534	Not bad for a first story, it has potential yet you may want to consider flushing out the characters a bit more, along with the actions. Focus on the sensations and sensuality each has, plus how they pick up on it from their partner. I give this one a thumbs up. __________________ To Dream of Dragons: Saga of Snow Cat Winter War: legend of the snow fox Sharks of Steel

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07-04-2012, 07:46 PM	#3
boner4u Amateur Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 95	Thanks SnowLeopard! I agree, this wasn't supposed to be an in depth novella. It was written in about five minutes for a long distance ladyfriend (she knew I'd be sharring it with others, so theres no problems with posting it here) to keep her satisfied when we couldn't skype. I don't know if I'll re-write it, so much as if I keep writing this kind of stuff, I may recycle the plot for something new...