I know the answer, but I'm not telling. I've got the story memorized.

 

To any and all witnesses....

To anyone and everyone reading my comments in Allison and the PD's:

Unless I'm quite mistaken, I would swear that the real dude behind Daddycums is well accustomed to much harsher critics than yours truly.

Moreover, I would never rake anything less than a great book with critical razor wire, as I am now doing with Allison and the Primdales. Make no mistake: I am on Chapter 29, and it is a great book.

With a limit of 1,000 characters per comment, it is impossible to soften the blows, so keep in mind, as you read my scathing comments:

1.) I know DC has a reason for everything that happens, and that it will all come together;

2.) the plot and characters are absolutely compelling;

3.) this book turns slow seduction into an artform, with a masterful combination of both pen and pressure cooker employed by the author;

4.) it deserves ten times as many reads as it is getting here.

Great stuff.

A.P.

P.S. DonB, don't say a bleeping word! Let me find out on my own!!!

 

I don't know where I've been the past few days, but I completely missed the debut of this thread. I had to read 82 posts to get caught up to this point. There is lots of great reading here in the LIBRARY.

Good idea. I hope it can survive without making it into a sticky. Eljs, maybe you can make that happen. Hope so!

 

A.P. I would not dare say anything to spoil the read.

I must, however, let you know that I am following your comments and having the time of my life.

Your sense of humor is magnificent and your acerbic style is wonderful - especially that I know things which you have yet to discover.

Don't stop now - I'm having too much fun.

Don

 

I must first apologize for the spelling of this post and the fact that it will make little sense because at the moment I'm mostly drunk. With that said...

I also never write with an outline. Well, mostly I don't write with an outline. I just sit down and start writing. I usually have a decent idea of what I want to happen and what my characters look like, but basically I just start typing away and see where the words lead me. But a definite outline is not really needed when you are writing a short story. However, I am working on a novel that I actually did sit down and write up an outline for because I knew exactly how I wanted the story to play out. Of course there are times that I have had to edit the outline because I did not follow it, but that just goes along with the territory.

As for writing outside my comfort zone, this new manuscript is filled with fight scenes, something that I know nothing about and cannot write very well. The content, or genre I guess I should say, is something that I write about a lot. They say to write what you know, but instead I'm making things up as I go with a genre that has already been done to death. Actually, I've went so far into left field with this genre that I am having to write a companion piece to the novel to explain how I came up with all the little perversions I have added to this genre. But that is the wonderful thing about fiction.....you get to make crap up and no one is ever the wiser, lol.

 

Don knows what he's talking about. He's read Allison and the Primdales so many times that he's probably more familiar with it than I am by now.

I just caught up with your latest comments and I'm really enjoying them. It seems you have a love-hate relationship with the story: you enjoy it but you can't quite get past the implausibility.

I agree; it's implausible. I was never quite satisfied with it myself because of that. And it just gets worse (or maybe better, depending on your point of view) as time goes on.

I still take it as a compliment that you point it out. Why? Because there are far more implausible stories right here on this site and yet you're not complaining about them. The difference? My writing style lends itself to a believable story, which means that my style itself is believable. That's what you're telling me, and I consider that a compliment because a believable writing style is not something that every author can pull off. Your complaint comes from the discrepancy between that believability and the implausibility of the characters and plot. That's a fair criticism.

By the way, despite the fact that some of your comments are kind of brutal, I humbly accept them in the spirit in which I assume they are given, as constructive criticism with the occasional hyperbole for the sake of humor. I hope none of my fans give you any grief over your comments (they sometimes get rabid when anyone says anything negative about my writing), but if they do, I'll be right there to defend you.

In the mean time, it looks like we're starting to hijack the Library, and despite the fact that the implication is that the Library is meant to be hijacked, there's a better place for comments about Allison and the Primdales. So in the future, if you have any more comments about the story as a whole, or something you'd like to say that's too long to fit in the comments on the individual chapters, I'd prefer that you resurrect this thread instead of posting them here. That goes for anyone, and not just aesexual pseudonym.

One last note: AP, in one of the chapters you called the story "beautiful filth." Considering that you use the term "filth" to refer to your own writing, I take that as the highest praise you could possibly give me.

 

Implausible - who cares.

Great story - you bet.

A.P. comments - delicious.

 

I reviewed First Saturdays in the Story Review thread. I hope you'll read it.

And DC - this thread is to speak about whatever you wish. There is no derailing an open thread.

 

Thanks! Going there now, to give meet your rabid fans and administer oxygen.

A.P.

 

I have a new story up, Melanie - The Art Lesson
http://stories.xnxx.com/story/24258/Melanie_-_The_Art_Lesson

Also, CrackedJaguar's new story hit today, Shattered Dreams
http://stories.xnxx.com/story/24254/Shattered_Dreams

 

ejls used a real title instead of just naming the story after the main character? I know she also included the name, but it's still a shock. It's like everything I've ever believed about the world is wrong. The sun comes up in the east. Spring comes after winter. And ejls uses the main character's name as the title of each of her stories.

I know, I know, she appended the part numbers to "Nora," but that was out of necessity. Now she's adding "The Art Lesson" to "Melanie" just because she can.

The universe must be falling apart.

 

Very funny, my friend. Maybe I'm growing, stretching. Be careful, you never know what I might do next.

 

http://stories.xnxx.com/story/24247/When_daughter_is_away

http://stories.xnxx.com/story/24245/A_daughter%27s_curiosity_gets_the_best_of_her

Two new stories from me. Read the tags on them before you continue reading, and if it is your kind of thing why not vote?

 

That vampire, horror, bondage, time travel, thing you mentioned for the story contest?

 

Thanx for the head's up, SS!

 

Oh my, SS - I feel like I'm being dared to write something with a tag I've never used before. Hmmmm, let me ponder this.

 

Having now read Eljs art lesson, some of it I found very amusing... mostly the art references, mostly because I can relate to them. I hate drawing people too! That said it was a very slow build story with a nicely styled climactic ending, with just enough humor thrown in to keep a grin on your face for most of the read.

 

Lately, I've been inspired by so many things. Beccah was inspired by the songs of David Cook. I played his CD for hours, everytime I drove my car. I find myself thinking of stories by hearing a phrase, seeing a picture, or meeting someone new.

Do your stories just come to you like that?

 

Although I only have a few stories to my credit, several of them are inspired in a similar way.
My 'Hotel' story was (quite obviously) inspired by the Hotel California, and there are several Eagles references within it (as well as a startling similarity to the Beverley Hills Hotel, which was the building featured on the cover of the Hotel California album), and my recent 'Remember That Night' story takes some inspiration from a couple of songs written by David Gilmour & Polly Samson.

Both were just inspired by me listening to music on my ipod during the long trek to work on the bus every morning.

 

I have been inspired by reading a story to write one. Sometimes it could be an experience or the slightest difference in my day that can create the seed that flourishes into a beautiful flowered story

For example. Lately I post a story and it hits 100% through some miracle, and there is this little vermin that votes my story down. this has happened since the beginning when I first posted a story about a year or so ago.

Like this one: http://stories.xnxx.com/story/24246/Touch_is_only_a_feeling

I posted it and finally gave it a vote so it would be at 100% and already this person who shall remain nameless voted it down. Not one moment in the spotlight for me. If it was a crap story I could understand, but come on now! I thought I stayed on topic and used complete sentences - the whole nine yards. See what you guys think if you've the time. Thanks