I appreciate your thoughts on my story. Fuck you very much!

 

All class

 

Least you could have done PP is let her know why you felt this story was "barely average quality" if it were me I would respect your opinion but I would want to know what I could do to make it better.

I've said it a dozen times in forum posts but I feel we only truly learn through feedback and criticisim. So like I said I respect your right to dislike her story but at least give her something to think about.

 

You're right! Thank You.

 

If my opinion means anything, I really liked Beth's story. I think many writers are worthy of recommendation and don't get it. In my opinion there are a some on this list that don't deserve to be here. But we should be helping each other grow as writers not putting down people with talent.

 

"It was Friday afternoon. I was alone. Oh how I hated the West Coast road trip. You see, my husband is a professional athlete here in Chicago. We met at the University of Michigan. He was drafted, and moved us to Chicago.

I prefer not to travel with him on this trip. I really don't get along with the other wives/girlfriends. They all seem so shallow. Showing off their expensive clothes and jewelry. Me, I am a born and bred farm girl from Minnesota. I am comfortable in a pair of jeans and a t-shirt.

The phone rings. I see from the caller ID that it's from my family back home. It's my Mom on the phone. "Hello Bethy", she says. "Mom, it's Beth
B-E-T-H." "OK whatever", she says. "why don't you come up for the weekend?" " Mom, it's an eight hour drive." "I couldn't do that by myself."
"Then fly up", she said. "My treat" "OK, let me call and see what flights are available" Don't worry", she said, "I booked you on a 7:00 a.m. flight tomorrow." "Mom, what if I said no?", I asked. She knew I would never turn down an invitation to go home though. "

So,go on,tell me why you rate that.

It was a Friday afternoon.
The phone rings.

We can't even keep the sodding tense consistent.

It might be a riveting story- if you don't mind mediocre writing- but as far as I'm concerned if its going be on the list then it better be pretty bloody good and this crap sure as hell isn't.

 

It means a lot to me! Thanks Dizzy.

 

I'm sorry, I would have to agree with PP on this one. I tried to read it but honestly the errors were too annoying. What I read showed some promise but it is a talent that needs major development.

 

Right there is what I'm talking about, when I read it I saw a writer with real talent and promise like you. I read through the story and liked it, but its your choice to disagree with me and that's cool.

PP I do see your point but I guess I don't see that when I read stories. For me to not like a story based off gramer and spelling it has to be REALY bad for me to notice it. When I read through Beths story I just didn't really processs it in the same terms I guess.

Beth don't give up on your writing. I can't spell to save my life(But I have learning disability) so I up graded my computer to try to bridge that gap. Before that I was hit with comment after comment about how my stories looked like they were written by a third grader. I didn't let it slow me down, please don't stop i want to see what you come up with next.

The the thread is recommended writers and I guess on the same side of the coin its about challenging those recommendations too. I hope to some day be on this list but I also don't think it means once you are you are above criticism.

 

Okay, well...

I will try this shameless 'promoting of myself' thing once more.

New author, only two stories but plenty more on the way, including a series.

Blood Red Wine is a lesbian vampire story, very short but I'm going to begin a series with that one, with an actual non-sexual story line! Of course the intense sex scenes will be an added bonus.

The Ruined Princess is very extreme, definitely read the tags beforehand, if that's not your cup of tea, then you'll hate it and probably suggest that I see a psychiatrist.

The link to my profile is on my signature. Merci!

 

I read her story and thought that the writing improved greatly as the story progressed. By the most recent additions I thought it flowed very nicely. I (obviously) liked her story and her style of writing and that is why I recommended her.
Comment on the CAW12 stories and VOTE

 

Ejls - that is why many new authors who are to become great ones listen to when honest critique is offered to them, and why many ask you and the other long term writers of the forum for such advice.

I will agree with you and PP as well, the talent is there, it just needs some refining which will come with time and work.

You offered me a few pointers as well, which I again thank you for back then, it provided the insight I needed to breach one more barrier that I knew was there and could not have figured out on my own.

Anyone seeing the grammatical and syntax disasters of some of my early stories will understand; and mind you, I see myself far below the level of the authors here such as ejls, elp, dizzy, wantsomefun, ahorsewithnoname and so many other true masters.

I receive more honest critiqes (such as I get) here in the forum, than in the main site; which is why few of my new stories in the works will ever go to the main site anymore - I get tired of mine being used as a dating request for the trolls.

 

I got to agree with the annoyance of Dating Requests by trolls. When i get the honest feedback I try to take it into account.

I do admit the verb tense and sentence structure are important, however I have noticed as I read and then reread peoples stories that many of the mistakes i pass over as my mind restructures what I'm reading to make sense. That is probably where I miss the errors in my stories. The mind is capable of making sense out of jumbled words such as:

I cl'onudt bleivee that I cloud acllutay usadntenrd waht I was rnideag The phennamoel pwoer of the haumn mind Aidncorcg to a reascreh at Cmirabgde Uiresinvty, it den'sot mtetar in waht order the leertts in a wrod are, the only ipnoatrmt tinhg is taht the fisrt and lsat leettr be in the rhigt place. The rset can be a tatol mses and you can siltl read it woutiht a ploebrm. This is bscauee the hmuan mnid deos not read eevry letetr by ielstf, but the wrod as a whole. Anamizg huh? Yaeh and I aalwys tohguht spielnlg was ipnarotmt.

Now I;m not saying by any means that errors be about, but nit picking every error is going overboard as I have read published books that had spelling or grammatical errors in them either the editors or printers missed.

I'm going to keep writing either way, double and triple checking before posting. If I miss some errors and they make it through I apologize to those who must have perfect writing over a good story. I thank everyone who reads the stories and gives me feedback. When I leave a comment on a story, I'll tell the author and if there were things that needed work and if there were things I liked, giving the positive with the negative. If the story was good despite the errors I read, I leave a positive rating. the only time I give a negative rating is if the story was truly bad enough to deserve it. With much of the talent on this site, I have only given very few negatives, mostly when there was no story and the writing style was disconnected or disjointed.

 

One thing of all the authors on the forum is each of us has at least one unique style to our writings; yet its that variety which adds the true spice to the entire forum soup.

I know my own stories tend to be chaotic, sardonic, humorous and the classical nerd-princess/goddess in the flesh style. I have a hard time writing the usual story site of - first sentence they are off to bed style.

Its not my cup of tea as they would say.

 

WOW! I never in my life thought someone would use my name and the term "True Master" int the same sentance, that's just awsome. Thanks a lot Snow you made my whole day.

 

The standard story...

I know I don't write in the traditional style of the site either. I don't see that as a bad thing as I like variety. I love authors who can make me want to know more about the characters. I love to take the people or creatures with powers and abilities that make them super human and then show that they have the same character flaws as anyone else. They make mistakes and while they are powerful, they are not immune to the world around them.

I enjoy all types of stories but one of my favorites came from SomeStory. The more recent of his two series, mostly because the main character comes across more real. His situation isn't so real, but makes for a good tale.

 

DAMNABLE SPAMMERS

 

I like Ka Hmnd's stories

 

I would have to recomend Rhiannon57 for his story "Game of Inches" its one of the all time best stories on this site right now. The story is still being written but after 14 chapters this is one hell of a novel. I was hooked form the very beginning and it only got better every chapter.

 

are you kidding me?
ka hamnd is a hack writer and definately not worthy of this list
this list is for writers who write great stories and ka hamnd does not fit that definition
i can think of at least a hundred writers that should be on this list before ka hamnd
take anyone of the writer brave enough to write for the writing contests the quality of their stories are much better then the hack writing of ka hamnd