LOL!! Oh gosh, no. Please do not put that image in my head!

 

You're such a great writer! I'm not a huge fan of blood, but I still enjoyed this one.

 

yeahh all the steve's I know are the equivalent of a fucktard too....the moral here, don't name your kid steve!:excited:

 

I enjoyed this immensely.....now if only Tim could have implicated Steve.....or if gotten Kim to watch...just ideas

 

I ran into "Steve's" wife outside today when I got back from my bike ride and she asked me how I was doing... I had to laugh. :excited:

 

thanks for good story

 

I like it but the cuts and deaths is not my cup of tea.

 

Once again, a great story. I can't wait for the next one.

 

Hey, great story!!!

 

Interesting story, very dark. I quite like it.

 

loved it!

 

Wow, they could have been one of the most amazing sex stories ever, until the end. I understand where you were going there, but you took it to far, just way to far. I got completly turned off. Now I understand the story is completly fiction but you grow attached to the girl, so ending her was a good/wierd twist, but not good for a sex story. Overall it was great, but the ending was made more for a movie/book not for a sex story.

 

i must say this had me very suprized i feel like i just read one off the best horor books ever. i enjoyed every bit of this yes it was dark and some ppl ar going WTF!!!! but for me i couldnt stop reading i just read this 2 times. i thought it was that good to be honest i think it would make a great film i enjoyed this story and am lookin forward to more u ar a innovative writer. thank u i enjoyed this

 

Personally I didn't favor the way the story was turning, not into such bdsm.
But otherwise I will agree the story is written very well. =]

 

very sexy, im not really into the emo or goth so much but would luv to be used and abused like that, except for the dying part of course. :excited:

 

good story

 

this one's too good

 

good writing

the writing was good, but why did she have to be underage? was it for added dramatic effect?

 

The story was extremely well done. Blood is not really my thing, personally, but you are undeniably talented.

 

Hawkeyez - I made her 14 for a few reasons including,
1. I wanted her to be the daughter of Fucktard Steve and I wanted Steve to be roughly the same age as Tim. With Steve being thirty-nine, fourteen made sense.
2. The whole 'emo' character would not be as fun in someone over eighteen. (Most) eighteen year olds act far more reasonable and mature than I wanted Emo Girl to act.
3. Fourteen year old girls are sexy, and this is a sex story
4. Her being underage makes it an even bigger insult to Steve and commentary on his sad parenting since any reasonable man would care more about his precocious fourteen year old daughter (who seems to like wandering across the street half naked) than his car.
5. Some readers had written to me requesting a story with a younger character and I aim to please. :excited: