ONE DAY A GIRL NAME ALLISON NUMBEL,WAS IN HER ROOM LOOKING AT, A
BOOK HER DAD MIKE WAS IN THE NEXT ROOM LOOKING UP LITTEL KIDPORN,
HE SAID DAM I WISH I CLUD HAVE,MY OWN CHILD SLUT THEN HE SAID WELL DAM I'LL RAPE MY DAUGHTER ALI,HE PICK UP THE PHONE AND CALLED 5 OF HIS FRIENDS, ALLISON WAS READING THEN SHE SPILLED SOME DRINK ON HER,PANTY'S,SHE SAID OH SHOOT SHE TOOK HER PANTY'S OF 5MINT'S LATER 4 OF HER FATHER FRIEND'S SHOW UP,HER DAD LET THEM IN THEY WENT UP TO HER ROOM SAW SHE HAD NO PANTY'S,HER DAD SAID OH HONEY DO YOU NEED HELP SHE SAID OK DADDY THEN GUY HOLD HER DOWN,SHE SAID DADDY WHAT ARE THEY DOING HE SAID,SHUT UP BITCH AND TAKE IT NOW HER DAD TOOK HIS SHORT'S OFF,THEN HE STICK HIS HEAD OF HIS COCK IN HER LITTEL HOLE,SHE STARTED TO CRY SHE SAID STOP BUT HE WENT,IN DEEPER DEEPER THEN HIS FRIEND,SLAP THE BITCH LITTEL GIRL,SPANKED HER ASS HER DAD TRUNED HER BODIE OVER AND SPANKED THE LIITEL WHITE ASS STARTED TO SAY OOOOO YUMMY ASS,HE SAID ZACK TAKE THIS LITTEL ASSHOLE FOR A RIDE,OK MACK YOUR DUAGTHER IS SWEET LITTEL KID LOVE TO FUCK HER FACE TO CAN I,MACK SAID HELL YES,SHE STARTED TO SAY STOP BUT HER DAD SLAP HER FACE, SHE SAID STOP HE GAG HER, HIS FRIEND STARTED TO RAPE HER ASSHOLE IN OUT IN OUT HE WENT, THEN HIS TWO OTHER FRIEND'S WANTED SOME ASS MACK SAID,LET'S HANG MY KID FROM THE CELLING, OK LET'S THEY HANG ALI ON TO ROPE HER HAND'S WERE IN ONE ROPE HER FEET,IN THE OTHERE ONE,PUT THAT GAG IN HER MOUTH OK,IT'S IN NOW, LET'S WIP HER ASS THEN MACK STARTED TO PUT HIS HEAD OF HIS COCK IN HER MOUTH,SHE STARTED TO CRY HE BUNCH HER FACE SHE WAS SO RED AFTER THAT HE JUST,FACEFUCK HER,SHE SAID DADDY STOP HE BUNCH HER AAGIN AND AAGIN, THEN FUCK HER WHOREY MOUTH THEN HIS FRIEND'S CAME ALL OEVER HER FACE MACK SAID CHARLIE COME HER AND FACEFUCK, HER FOR AWHILE OK MACK HE SLAP AND BUNCH HER FACE,THEN HE FUCK HER FACE INTILL A HOLE SLAB OF CUM CAME OUT OF HER SLUTTY MOUTH, THE WORLD OF CHILDMOLESTER'S SO COOOOOOOOOOOL HUH?

 

I don't know if this even deserves a comet. The wording is terrible. Very poor taste in the story line. The use of caps is out of line. HELL I WAS PUT OFF BY THE WHOLE THING.

 

CALM the FUCK down with all of the CAPS!
FUCKIN HURT my EYES

 

Jesus Christ, with that being done I am thinking of that episode of South Park where Cartman pretends his hand is possessed by J-Lo. Funny joke, but not sure if it was worth it.

 

LMAO
Oh you are full of win!
I think I love you! lolol


As for the OP, you weren't serious I hope? You just said to yourself, "I'll have a little sport with the readers at XNXX and write a silly, semi-literate story all in caps to see how they respond!"

 

same here dude

 

"How many times can you see a 7 year old sodomized by an older gentleman before it all starts looking the same?"

-ROFLOh, if I had a nickle every time I asked myself that question.... (kidding)

 

everything about this story sucked the big one ,he cant spell for shit and hes got no ideal about what he,s writing

 

What he said! Just horrible.

 

there is no way this guy is serious lol. i've seen better on the stories section.

 

I think with some promotion the OP has a movie deal here.

 

Bronson's was better

 

you dirty stinking cunt you deserve a bullet in the head

 

not my fault his story sucks and is IN ALL CAPS

 

Well DB i have to say people of moderate intellect will agree with you, the neanderthol mind is curious to observe and there seems to be a brilliant specimen before us. My spelling may be shoddy at times but if im writing erotica (if this ... thing can be called such?) i at least have teh decency to type it in word and spell check it before posting to avoid anger or misunderstanding amongst my audience. And as for his "style" non-existant as it is i feel that saying this author is jevenile is an understatement, I was writing well structured absorbing erotica short stories when i was 14 so this "man" has no excuse unless of course he is age 7 and has just learnt how to join up his handwriting, and then, of course, why the f**k is he on here.

I enjoy this thread just so i can rip into it, heh.

 

:excited::excited:

 

good

 

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Ugh, grunt...groan....