And this thread belongs in the sex stories forum, unless stories too are being posted wherever a member sees fit. It's been here in GD since it was created.

 

Believe me it's all mine I originally come up with my own stuff.. I have it saved in my poems folder on my laptop..

 

Lol I write what I feel, And if no one likes it.. Than it's not my problem.. It doesn't bother me one bit about critics expressing themselves.. I'm glad they do.. I'm happy for them.. I'm no professional, So that's why i write.. Not for exposure, But cause i do it just to release some steam and vent.. I'm not offended by anyones comments.. lol So it doesn't bother me.. But thank you, I will keep writing.. :excited:

 

Your loutish prose gives away your demeanour,
I see you're back again pretenting to be a senior...
Burnt before now back for more :excited:
Here for pleasure or to settle a score?​

Your stale style stupifies, it's luke warm not hot,
Tepid's the definition now fuck off n show some contrition!
"But you need to listen up, Cause I'm at my best"
Well guess what son, (pardon the pun) you've failed the test
Run back to mummy and suckle her breast :excited:​

 

Nice

 

I don't feel your words, Cause there absurd,
It's doesn't bother me,
What you feel you see?

Cause all in all, Your just a critic roaming free,
So don't think you've cut a nerve,
From what I've heard.

You're no different from the bees or the birds,
Some squawk while others buzz,
But you're as bland as peach fuzz.

I don't come here to please, Or fill my ego,
You're lack of interest, Well it's a zero.

All I see is those who judge, But i'm not moving,
You can't make me budge, You opinions though,
Are just like fudge, Sticky and melted, And abrupt.

But that won't make me leave, For what I see,
Is in front of me, For what I write i through my own sight,
None of you know me, I'm like day and night.

You think your better, Well I disagree,
For none of you could ever know the real me.

So please keep chatting away,
For I only get stronger,
Day by day.

Written By
~KnightLover1~

 

These are lovely. Thank you for sharing them with us.

 

Thank you Ejls I appreciate your kind your words and your post on my thread. hugs and hope to chat some more with you if you would like :rose:

 

The road I travel, Where does it lead?
Broken and alone, My wounds still bleed.

Never been healed, Never been right,
Why do you ask?, The answer escapes me every night.

They say friends are forever, But that's a lie,
Nothing lasts forever, Now I know why?

Been down every path, Some good and bad,
Been through many emotions, From mad to sad.

Judge me or hate me, Love me or not,
But whatever you feel, My heart is bigger
than what you got.

Your lies are like wind chimes hanging outside,
For when the wind blows, You die a little each time.

Your heart turns cold, Nothing but Ice,
For I'm full of more personality,
And have more fight.

You say there is a line between love and friends,
But what does it matter, If there with you till the end.

I've made my peace and said what I have deep within,
But for whatever you once were, Your no longer my friend.

Written By
KnightLover1

 

Time now, And time again,
So few real people, And fake friends.

It's really stupid, And immature,
If your not here, Then your a false cure.

No posion too deadly, The stress to heavy,
But if I'm such a burden, Then leave already.

Stop pretending, Like you care,
For goodness sake, Your just a fake you hear.

Go away and stay off my list,
Your nothing more then a death kiss.

You say you care, but It's nothing but a lie,
So long and farewell, And goodbye.

Your friendship faded with every action,
So get your bags and get the packing.

For I never want to see you near me again,
Cause your nothing more than a fake friend.

Written By
~KnightLover1~

 

Moved on through a different time,
Moved through this world so sublime.

What may you ask or find?
Who knows whats in my mind?

Only I can unlock this truth,
To be better is all I can do.

To stay strong and make a wall,
To high to even crawl.

To thick to break down,
So tough all around.

My heart yearns to be loved,
But I'm cursed from up above.

Beend ditched through every try,
Just worthless, I want to die.

My existence is rare and rough,
No scientist, Or muscle buff.

My mind stays filled with many thoughts,
I will never let myself be bought.

For my time clock ticks away,
Till the very end I will stay.

Untill my very last breath,
For life is nothing but a test.

Written By
~KnightLover1~

 

female voice

My style is fresh, My game is hot,
You can't hold me down, Cause I blaze the spot.

You hate on me for the way I dress,
But you need to listen up, Cause I'm at my best.

I'm hotter than lava, Too hot to touch,
But watch out for my sparks, I'm blowing up.

My style is new and hot to the T,
I'm about to enter a new space oddyssey.

I've been loved and burned so many times,
I'm like a black cat with 9 million lives.

So keep yourself tuned in, And turn me up,
For i will surprise you when I burn it up.

I'm no other guy, Cause I stay fly.
But I will only be around so long, before I run out of time.

 

Nice poems Knight, You do have talent. All i suggest is Don't be afraid to not rhyme on one or two. and write down if a good idea comes to mind. I have lost a few good starting lines because i failed to do so.

 

Thanks, Some of them were not my best work.. As I was only starting out.. But I have definitely gotten a little better at it. For I'm no pro that's for sure.. lol But it helps to have the proper feedback from a fellow poem writer.

 

New Poem

Bulletproof

Walking down a path, Full of nothing but waste
The destruction left before me, Feeling the heat upon my face.
The massacre I caused, The bodies on the ground,
There is no turning back, It's time to turn around.

My persona growing stronger, My eyes filled with rage.
The moment is drawing closer, The fire is a blaze.
Every second counts, The time is very near.
For when your backed in a corner, All you see is fear.

But have faith strong one, Stand your ground.
You are the last hope, time to move on out.
Strap on your armor and get ready to fight.
Your bulletproof now, So give it all your might.

Walk before your doomsday, Give them hell.
Rock your enemies, And ring their bell.
Be stealthy like a ninja, never seen or heard.
Move swiftly on your feet, Like wings on a bird.

Bulletproof forever now and more.
Super strength and hardcore.
Be bulletproof as you face the demon.
Walk from the ashes, Smoke rising and steaming.

Take out your foes from left to right.
Keep your head up, And fight.
Remember your goals, And stay in tune.
For all that you cause, Will lay in ruin.

Written By
~KnightLover1

 

Very good. best so far. Again feel free to step away from Rhymes and Use a thesaurs. You will never find some more "powerful words" to aid in description. Just a hint not a critique

 

Very good

 

Thanks i appreciate it, I will surely take your advice on that. I guess i have a knack for rhyming.. lol, But definitely will look at one and see what i find.

Much Appreciated. Glad to have some followers. :excited:

 

Doomsday Cometh

Doomsday approaches, with every second near,
Feel the earth shaking, As it rumbles and quakes,
No such power is greater than thee, For it's a sign,
That when all is lost on this planet, Your life is at an end.

Doomsday signals many forth coming woes.
A waste land awaiting you're souls.
The grim reaper by many names he is known,
He is the puppet master who pulls our strings.
An evil reincarnation of gods image from the dark depths.

What has doomsday done to this world,
For every human who walked among it,
No longer exists to be known, Gone and turned to ash,
Every stone crumbled, every building battered.

All the life has been drained, Nothing has survived,
For the future has come, As the past has died,
Doomsday is the fiend, He caused this chaos,
Destruction and torment is his way.

He feeds upon the weak and kills off the day,
The wreckage of this aftermath, left in dying ash,
Many fires a blaze, Though no rescue on in sight,
The roads all cracked and burned to tar.

Doomsday Cometh, You know my name,
Trouble is my fuel, Anguish is my game,
Spin the wheel of fate, Or roll the die,
For no mortal in my path shall survive.

Written By
~KnightLover1~

 

Euphoria

Feel the breeze upon your skin,
Euphoria regins and life begins,
Look upon the land at day break,
Feel the rays upon your cheek.

The sunlight will wash away the pain,
Emotions will all be released,
As the winds pick up again,
Like a winter chill across the land.

Euphoria, Gentle and soft and sweet,
Many feelings collide through the streets,
Humanity is at it's best, rain down upon me,
Change my outlook and keep me blessed.

Listen as joy fills the air, euphoria is what they say.
Stand next to the gentle winds, bring about a fresh start.
Crash into the white clouds, break away to the sun.
Euphoria at peace again, Come all and rejoice.

For euphoria is a gentle kin, Next in line for happiness.
Singing sweet tunes of laughter, and smiles to be had.
Curse every bad beginning, and let euphoria be your friend.

Written By
~KnightLover1~