I have no problem with sex scenes, I came here for the ole reaon to write uncensored filth


it' s the getting to the filth in a way that seems fluid and natural with the characters which can be the hurdle

 

exactly . . .

 

One more bit of advice.

When writing the scene, identify the mood and write for that. Most inexperienced authors assume the sex scenes should all be hot and heavy, but that's just one possibility. The mood will often be dictated by the relationship between the characters.

Frisky and playful? Have the characters wrestle, or tickle, or tease each other verbally.

Tender and loving? Have the characters take it slowly. Hugging, kissing, massaging, or even just gazing lovingly into each other's eyes.

Hot and passionate? Make it energetic. Don't leave the characters in missionary position the whole time; have them switch positions multiple times, or even leave the bed entirely for some more creative locations and positions.

One of the more creative sex scenes I've read was in snowleopard's Mr. Phillips and Miss Jasmine. The guy was so smitten by the girl that his brain essentially turned off and he became the world's biggest klutz. The sex involved a lot of accidental crashing into nearby objects. They damn near wrecked his entire store by the time they were finished!

 

No problems really, except in describing genitalia. How many different or creative ways can you describe a penis ? The best thing to do is describe the characters thoughts and emotions. Who does fuckin' this person make the character think about ? Are they holding back the cosmic forces of nature and the pure energy of creation... or are they remembering that time they walked in on granny while she was cleaning her vag in the shower?

Try to keep physical descriptions in erotica to a low-middle anyways, because it turns out readers of erotica naturally tend to fill in the blanks of the characters looks with their own fantasy. Do you wanna see the redhead i'm doin' or do you wanna see the redhead YOU'RE doin' ?

 

Neither, I prefer brunettes. Of the male variety

But all joking apart, that's actually a pretty good way to explain it.

 

DC thanks, that scene is screwball to the extreme, when I was thinking on how to do it I wound up thinking of the original Pink Panther and decided why not have a true geek-princess encounter.

In essence its every guys absolute nightmare, perfect woman shows interest in you and everything klutzy occurs...:excited:

 

Sanguine - quite often in my works I use different terms for the love works of men and women, just ones like 'manhood' and 'womanhood' and the like. It's a mix of old and new world, sometimes reaching into another culture or time and using such phrases in a story weaves an extra layer of wonder and delight into it.

 

I came across this short story and thought it might help one or two folk who are struggling with their writing. It got me hard! (It's NOT my story, by the way!)

AN EROTIC AWAKENING​

The scene: naked in your bed together, early morning... not quite light but not dark either....warm already and the duvet has slipped off our bodies…

I wake up before you... you have your back to me... I'm laying on my back and turn over to look at you.... the light coming through the window shines on you laying there with your hair fanned out around your head, your legs slightly drawn up, looking childlike... I smile.

I reach out and place my hand lightly on your ass, stroking the firm curvature of your bed-warm skin, feeling myself beginning to get hard. I slowly run my hand up your back, a finger tracing your spine. I stroke your shoulder, gently moving your hair away from your neck. I lean over and lightly brush my lips on the back of your neck, kiss your shoulder, your back, my tongue tracing the line of your spine down to your ass and back up again to your neck. My hand lays on your thigh, stroking you, as my lips kiss the back of your neck , your warm soft cheek, your ear. I move the hand on your thigh forward and run it up your body as my cock reaches full stiffness and is prodding your back. My fingertips touch the underside of your breast, stroking lightly, moving toward the dark aureole. As I run a fingertip over your nipple it begins to stiffen. I take the hard bud between two fingers and gently squeeze it. You make a small noise and open your eyes.

I look at you and smile. You look so gorgeous, your eyes heavy and sleepy, slightly confused. I feel my heart miss a beat as I look at you, feeling an incredible rush of love fill my body, causing my cock to swell even firmer. You make to speak, but I quickly place a finger over your lips and shake my head 'no'. You smile.

I gently ease you onto your back and watch as you stretch the sleep stiffness out of your body; sleek like a cat. It's beautiful to watch as the sunlight lays over your sexy body I lean across you, seeking your lips with mine. As we kiss my hand cups your breast, lightly squeezing, my thumb rubbing the hard bud of your nipple. Your tongue slips between my teeth and I suck it into my mouth, licking your teeth as you lick mine. You are murmuring as you come more fully awake, reaching your arms around my neck and pulling me closer as we kiss, both of us becoming more and more aroused.


We kiss for several minutes, my hand playing with your breasts, squeezing and teasing the nipples until I break our kiss. I lay your arms above your head as I kiss your forehead, your eyes , your nose, your cheeks, your neck, slowly kissing my way down your body to your chest, your breasts. My mouth finds one nipple and my lips close over it. I flick the tip of my tongue rapidly over the sensitive bud, drawing it into my mouth as my hand holds your other breast. I gently close my teeth over your nipple, very lightly biting. You make a small noise of pain but no more as my mouth moves to your other breast and licks and sucks the hard nipple, again my teeth lightly bite down. You moan in pleasure but do not speak. I give each of your breasts one final kiss before moving my head, my lips lightly kissing your flat stomach. The sun is warm on your naked body, but I feel goose-bumps break out and you shiver as my lips kiss you from one side of your body to the other, moving down towards your thighs.

I lay my body alongside you and you reach for my swollen cock. I can't help but moan in pleasure as I feel your fingers wrap around me and squeeze. My lips kiss the swell of your pussy. I trail my tongue through your strip of curly hair and feel you shiver again. Your hand grips me tighter and begins to move up and down my swollen shaft. I remove your hand then raise myself up and lay on top of you, my head over your pussy; my cock over your face. You reach up for me and pull my cock. I lower myself and feel my cock head slip into your warm, moist mouth. I make a noise of pleasure as I feel your tongue lick the smooth head, circle it and suck me hard.

I part your thighs, and move my face to your pussy. I can smell last night's sex on you; strong, pungent, arousing. I slip the tip of my tongue between the two halves of your pussy, seeking your clitty. I feel you flinch as your sensitive bud responds to the feel of my tongue flicking over it and your mouth closes more tightly around my cock, sucking me harder. My hands stroke your legs as far as I can reach before sliding back up along your inner thighs. I tease your pussy with my fingers, lightly touching your soft labial lips, circling your entrance but not penetrating you. Your pussy is getting wetter and wetter as my fingers tease and tantalise. Your body wriggles under my weight as your mouth sucks my swollen cock as hard as you can, drawing it as deep into your mouth as you can take it. I am resisting moving my hips, enjoying the feelings in my own body.

I feel your clitty harden as I lick it, drawing my tongue very slowly over its sensitive surface before running the tip all around it then licking again, over and over. I can feel your body tensing under me and your mouth releases my cock as you gasp for breath. Over and over my tongue teases your clitty, your body rigid with tension, your pussy making so much love juices that it makes a damp patch on the bed. Your hands grasp my hips as you feel yourself coming ever closer to the brink of orgasm and I hear you mewling as you will yourself to cum. And still my tongue licks you, circles your clitty and my fingers tease your pussy. Your body is almost throbbing with tension and you are thrusting your pussy into my face, but I do not stop what I am doing. Suddenly, you cry out, an animal-like wail and your hips rise up off the bed as, at last, your body gets the release it has been craving. You thrash and writhe under me as my tongue continues to lick your clitty. I feel your fingernails rake my back, my ass as wave after wave of pure sexual pleasure engulfs you, your mind a blank except for the sensations you are enjoying.

I feel your body begin to lose it's stiffness as your orgasm peaks. You are panting, and your hips settle back onto your bed. I give your clitty one final long slow lick before removing my head from between your thighs and laying myself alongside you again. You immediately grab me and we kiss, hot, passionate kisses, our lips kissing hard and hungrily. I reach over to you and help you to lay on my body. Your face is flushed; your beautiful blue eyes bright and shining. I whisper 'I love you' and you say 'I love you' too.

We lay together, my arms holding you tightly, your breasts pressed into my chest, my hands stroking your ass cheeks. After a few minutes you raise yourself up, and place one hand on my chest. You lift your ass up and reach behind your ass an find my stiff cock. You position your wet pussy over me and slowly swallow my length into your hot wet sex. A cheeky, sexy smile lights up your face as you feel me inside you at last. Slowly you raise your ass up then slip back down again over me.

I look up at you: the sunlight streaming through the window shines straight on your beautiful body: your straight back, your tousled hair, your flushed, smiling face, the swell of your firm breasts, and the mischievous twinkle in your incredible blue eyes. I feel so much love for you in that single moment that my eyes prickle with tears and I reach for you, pull you close and kiss you tenderly. Your pussy is still gripping my cock tightly, your hips moving slowly up and down, up and down, making me feel incredible, like the luckiest guy in the world.

You raise yourself up again, laying your hands flat on my chest. Smiling sexily at me, your pussy rises up and down on my cock in a smooth regular rhythm. I have never felt so big, so stiff as your sexy body stimulates me in a way it has never been aroused before. I feel my body responding to you, our bodies becoming as one as you make sensational love with me. I reach for your pussy, but you stay my hand. I watch as you place your own hand between your pussy lips, quickly finding your clitty. Your eyes close as you rub yourself, stroking yourself in perfect time with the rise and fall of your pussy on my cock. You toss your head back and I watch as your tongue licks your lips, making that simple act something incredibly sensual and erotic. My hands reach for your breasts, cupping them, feeling the hardness of the nipples pressing into my hands as I squeeze their firmness.

I feel your pussy tighten around my cock as you bring your self nearer to orgasm. I feel the cum in my sac start to rise and I begin to breathe faster. I want you to make me cum so badly but you don't change a thing. Your pussy rises and falls, your finger strokes your clitty and my hands hold your breasts, my fingers pinching your nipples. I see your mouth open as you become more and more aroused. Your pussy is so tight on my cock, so exquisitely tight that I feel myself rapidly reaching the brink of climax... I'm panting now, my body tensing as I will that rush when I cum to hurry up... your face wears a picture of ecstasy, the brilliant sunshine creating a halo of light around you, making you appear as an angel. You begin to make low keening noises, your face a mask of concentration, your hand rubbing your clitty vigorously. I feel my cock swell thicker, stiffer, tighter in your pussy. I feel my mind blank out as my prick seems to explode and the most amazing mind-blowing sensual sensations swamp me. From somewhere far, far away I hear you cry out and realise that you have also cum. I can feel you pounding your pussy onto my cock as it fills your pussy with cum, so much cum that it leaks out of you. The real world disappears to be replaced by heaven in your bedroom as this beautiful angel takes me somewhere I have never been before. Over and over my cock spasms, sending thick streams of cum into your body. I sense you looking at me, and I open my eyes. You are smiling at me, loving me and my heart swells in my chest.

For many minutes I am lost in a world of pure sexual and sensual pleasure as my climax rises, rises, rises, then peaks. Then I feel your lips softly laying against mine, kissing me so tenderly, so lovingly that I am brought gently back to you on a beam of sunlight. You slide off my softening cock and lay beside me. We lay face to face, our bodies pressed tightly together. I gaze into your beautiful blue eyes and know that I am yours forever....


Now THAT is what I call a sex scene

 

I've been told I can write a pretty decent sex scene (I have stories on other sites, under different pseudonyms), and I find them fairly easy to write, but it gets boring and at times, ludicrous.

For me the challenge is not becoming overly repetitive, finding different words to describe similar acts, body parts, etc. Generally, if I can see a part of a story clearly in my head, I can write it pretty well.

The really fun part, yet the most difficult, is finding the key dynamic tensions that drives a story forward. Otherwise I find I'm writing a badly scripted porn film (hot female meets hot male and hilarity ensues), which is boring.

 

Yes bad topic lol

I basically have problems writing altogether. I have a learning disability and it's hard for me to write. I love to write though and I try to remember to get inside the characters, the sights sounds etc. That is how I made my Elizabeth so unique! She is basically me, unfortunatly the sex is not great! Elizabeth does not like sex, which also means neither do I?! I had a problem with that department when I was younger and so writing about sex is difficult. Thankfully when I started the sex scene, I pretended I was the girl with a hot guy! That helped some for me to write the story better. I just hope people will buy my book off of amazon and maybe they can give me some tips after they read my book. I will have an editor next time around so my book will be better too. I just didn't have one before I published and I had no money for editing professionally. That would have been over 1,000 bucks unless I wanted to wait to publish another couple years, lol. I never have 1,000 bucks ever and i didn't want to wait. I keep being told that we are all going to die soon cuz the world is going to end! So anyways hope that helps! remember sights sounds feelings!! which is what every one else has been saying too lol

 

If I may take umbrage with some of the posts here with one statement:

THERE IS NO SUCH THING AS A BAD SEX SCENE

Somebody, somewhere, will relate to your sex scene, no matter how it is written. All the wordy, fancy prose in the world will mean jack shit to someone who does not have a wide vocabulary, for instance., of if they cannot relate to what is being described. Therefore a sex scene described in simple basic language might well appeal to such a person.

There seems to me that there is a sort-of 'snobbery' being exhibited here; that if a scene is not described in wonderful prose and in the most excrutiating detail then it's not a good sex sex. That, my friends, is utter crap!

Sure, I have read stuff that has left me cold; on the other hand I have read stuff that has got me hot 'n' horny. Most annoyingly, though, I have also read stuff that has left me completely baffled!

In my opinion, there is no 'right' or 'wrong' way to write a sex scene: write what makes the best sense to you. That is all you can do.

 

While you do make some good points, I'm not sure I agree with you, probably because I'm one of the 'snobs.'

You're right that different stories will appeal to different people. And there's nothing wrong with using simple, basic language. But sex scenes are just like any other writing: some are better than others.

As an example, someone might enjoy the following sex scene:

i stukt my hannd dwn her pans n feel her cunt. den we did a 69. den i fukt her.

But just because someone might enjoy it doesn't mean it's not just plain bad. Is it snobbery to claim that the author needs to put more effort into his story next time?

Besides, there's nothing wrong with snobbery when it comes to your own creative works. In fact, I would even call it an asset. Snobbery is about criticism, and self criticism (at least with the right attitude) is a necessary tool for improving.

 

Agreed! sometime I read a story and get plain angry at the basic grammar mistakes. I'm not talking about the finer points of grammar, I'm talking about mistakes that show that the writer has never read a book in their life, and shouldn't even be allowed near a keyboard. Things like "I should of known..." Really? Do you even speak English? I know, I know I make more mistakes than many other writers here, and I should be the last one to complain. But dammit, if you're going to subject other people to your stories, have the decency to at least use a basic spell-check on Word.

 

I'm glad I'm not the only one.

I know what naked bodies look like. I know what happens during sexual intercourse. Reading about naked bodies having sexual intercourse bores me, so I seldom write about it.

In most of my stories sexual intercourse simply does not happen. There may be a certain amount of eroticism, but that is about all. I prefer to read and write about the emotional aspects of human sexuality rather than the physical aspects.

I like to read, and I try to write, stories with emotional depth, plausibility, and psychological insight.

When sexual intercourse does happen in one of my stories it is usually unsatisfying, and arouses feelings of guilt, jealousy, and the fear of unwanted pregnancy.

 

I will read several paragraphs of a story. It they do not draw me into the story I stop reading.

I lose interest in a story quickly if it has errors of spelling and grammar.

Also, I dislike obscene words. Shakespeare did not need them, so I do not see why others do. They might be acceptable in dialogue, but never in description.

 

Im really dont like describing sex scenes in my story. Only because its so intimate. I feel like Im sharing the parts of me and my wife that is only between us. I know I may change things here and there but I just dont enjoy that part. I like the telling of the story and the events of life.

 

Despite the fact that I know you don't like my work, we have similar standards in our fiction reading and writing. I read for relaxation and enjoyment. If I wanted to decipher code or grade fifth grade English composition papers, I'd do that instead of reading fiction.

I rarely start a story in the bedroom, and if I do, I then fill in the details about how the characters got there. Usually, I fill a lot of pages with the build-up -- introducing the characters to each other and the reader, describing feelings, and creating anticipation for the "good parts." Verbal foreplay, if you will. I want my readers to know who is doing what to or with whom, and why.

I wrote a non-erotic piece for CAW #13, and actually got a decent number of reads, so I'm not sure that sex is absolutely required for a story here. In that particular piece, there was no logical way to add lust or sex, so I didn't.

Characters' vocabulary can be used to tell the reader about the people and the situation they are in. A man treating his woman with love and respect is less likely to say "I'm gonna rip you up. I'm gonna choke you on my cock and fuck you till you bleed," than a rapist is. Similarly, a couple in the throes of vigorous mating isn't going to talk about "that delicious spot behind your right ear," or the tender emotions they feel.

It's my contention that coarse vocabulary can have it's place in a story -- during an altercation, a session of unbridled passion, and even in teasing sometimes. There are situations where it makes sense for a male protagonist to gently caress the hair away from a woman's ear to whisper, "I'm going to suck your nipples until your cunt drips, and then I'm going to fuck you like you've never been fucked before."

Ladies? Your opinion?

 

I generally agree with everything you say, especially with regard to crude language. I use 'fuck' occasionally in the story but never 'cunt' to describe female genitalia. It's unnecessary most of the time.

I also draw my characters as realistically as possible, giving them a history and back-story. I have been told that it is often the best part of my writing!

I also feel that it depends which perspective you are writing from that dictates how any scene is written, be it a sex scene or a plat scene. I prefer to write in the first-person because I can better describe the thoughts and feelings of my character/s more acurately and in greater detail. I fell I have not written as well from the third-person perspective on those few occasions I have done so.

 

Since this thread is referenced on the 'Elaborate Sexual Descriptions' thread, I thought it worth a bounce back to have them on the same page.

 

It's kind of a sticking point for me sometimes. The stuff I write for the main XNXX site is mainly designed to let me write about the things I can't in my attempts to break into the word of "legitimate" writing professionally.

I feel sometimes like I owe it to the readers on a sex story site to give them a fairly detailed description of sex as a "pay-off" for sticking with the story through all the ups and downs. What I've discovered is that the better a job I do on the rest of the story the more rewarding the sex scene feels when it finally gets there.

I think what really makes the sex easier to write is if I have created a mood for the sex and follow through on the mood. Then, a great deal of the scene can revolve around the characters' inner thoughts during the sex. There are a limited number of physical approaches to sex, but there are far more mental and verbal approaches to it. A big part of the scene then comes from the emotional reasoning for characters acting in the way they do during sex, and the emotional reward they draw from the way their lover acts.

Finally, I constantly struggle to come up with something "fresh" for the sex scenes so that they are not too like something I did six stories back. Then I tend to laugh at myself a bit. Does anyone really remember the way I wrote a scene six stories ago? No, they might remember that they liked it or hated it, but they don't remember the details. I'm just not that good that anyone would pay that much attention to the details.