http://stories.xnxx.com/story/45586/Nightmare_in_the_Gallery

 

Incredible, and well done. With tales such as I have read Ejls, the voting will be hard to narrow down for a final choice.

 

I found this utterly compelling; I don't pretend to be a critic- not of good stuff- but for me this succeeded in so many ways.

The structure was perfect; the progression was paced just right, the story remained focused the whole time, your characters were credible and engaging and their actions were consistent with their personalities.

I find there's an honesty in your characters showing a side of themselves you weren't prepared to expose before CAW12 (in my humble opinion). I thought your entry in that was a masterpiece and I was surprised it wasn't on the podium to be honest.

Look I'll stop rabbiting on, just I hope you're proud as hell of this one because you have every right to be and my apologies; I voted positive but I forgot to blimin log in- duh.

 

Well worth the wait

As PP said, i also am no critic. I am much better at writing my own work than commenting on others which is not really saying that much.

Your attention to detail and either knowledge of the material or research on the topic or both is second to none. It's as if you lived somewhere within the story while it is an obvious work of fiction. I guess what i am clumsily trying to say is you always make the reader FEEL.

A fantastic read :rose:FJ:rose:

 

Super stuff Ejls!

Creepy, suspense-laden and a perfectly eerie and supernatural ending. Brilliant.

Also some hot sex too - you have said before that you find that part of it difficult sometimes but you really nailed it there (pun not originally intended).

There are a few parallels between my story and yours, which is a little spooky - the sleeping woman feeling a weight on her chest, and the appearance of horses, dark nights, cold air and the like are all naturally inspired by the painting, but I find it odd that we have both included female solo shower scenes

Incidentally, I followed the link to your story, but it appears I wasn't logged in when I voted for it - anyone else wishing to give their full four votes for this great tale should check that they are logged in before clicking the button!

 

Eljs - once again with this story, after a second read, it shows why you are among the best authors of the site; and there are many exceptional authors here in xnxx forum.

You stated once it was difficult to write; and yet you have produced a true materpiece.

Hats off yet again for such a wonderful tale.

 

THIS story sent shivers down my spine as I was reading it.
STORY perhaps, but I think this was a work of art.
REALLY don't see how I'll be visiting any art galleries soon.
SUCKED me in, yep, lock, stock and barrel. Gonna' have nightmares. Thanks! Can't walk in the dark now either. Thanks!

Bottom line? Yet another great story. And, ya' got my 4 votes over there under my name (ha ha Janey!).

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I am truly blown away by these comments. Thank you. I wish I had better words. Thank you.

Jaleesha Johnson

 

Odd, I couldn't see the image until I quote and previewed.

Anyway, you posted her pic before, and your words captured her. I bet she looks DAMN good in her full security guard uniform, too.

Let me add my voice to the others who commented on your sex scenes in this story. Here it is: "Holy shit, woman! That was fuckin' HOT!!!"

Which, despite your arguments, is true about virtually all your intimate scenes. Some are tender love-making in a romantic setting, but we've seen you write some different things lately -- adultery on the beach with a brain-injured man, rape, rough, and solo.

If it makes you feel better, keep telling yourself you can't write.

We all know better.

 

WOW

Another well-written masterpiece. I'm glad I saw the picture of your Nubian beauty before reading your tale. I put her in every scene I read.

Dearest, you know that I love all that you write. You write far superior to me. I must admit that I sometimes read a story so far-over-my-head that I fail to grasp the author's ending or overall message. I've done so here [which in no case diminishes its merit].

You owe no explanation to one so naive as me. :rose:

 

bounce and flowers to a true lady and lauriette of stories. :rose::rose::rose::rose:

 

bounce

 

Excellent CAW 13 story!

Hi ejls, I had really enjoyed reading this CAW 13 story that you had written. I have to agree with the other readers comments as well on your story. Your ability to write such incredible tales such as this one, never seems to disappoint me. (I love the picture...I felt that it was an added bonus!) :rose:

Good luck in the CAW 13!

 

WHY do I read this stuff so late at night?

I remember thinking that your last story was different from your "usual" stuff... then I started to feel that way again, reading this story... but then I realized that you don't really HAVE any "usual stuff" anymore. Your talent crosses many genres and themes, and, to me anyway, that's a sure sign of an excellent writer and storyteller.

I am particularly impressed by and fond of the level of focus your writing conveys - for someone as wordy (mouthy?) as I, the hardest part of speaking or writing is providing adequate detail/descriptiveness without detracting from the main elements of the story you set out to tell. It's something you do exceptionally well.

Thank you for another great story.

 

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That was one superbly written story and I really appreciated the ending.

 

Understatement there, this is one of the best I have read of Ejls.

 

This piece is publication worthy. All that is needed is the publisher - possibly a mag?

 

Detroit Institute of Arts Museum



The Nightmare that is housed in Detroit

 

The Freedman

 

Ejls - interesting, very interesting.