Ya' know, Jane, this isn't the first time that you've read a story at the same time as me, and then posted just before I was going to post. Are you spying on me??!!

Seriously, I could simply take your comments and put a "+1" after them, as they pretty much say the same thing that I would say.

I like the writing style quite a bit. As I was reading it, I thought, hmmm, she's writing a dark story like mine...but then it moved away from that, and there was hope. Then there was the roller coaster ride. Then budding love. Then some possible tragedy. Then blooming love. Then resolution of a conflict. Then true love. Finally, there was Hope!

All in one story. Excellent! Not just for a first CAW entry, but excellent in general. I've read very few stories yet, just getting my motor running in that regard, but if this is an indication of the quality of other stories, wow, I'm in for a real holiday treat this year!

Thank you, Ms. Pixy, for a wonderful, hope-filled story. :excited:

 

I'll agree with both of you. This tale of Pixy's is among the finalists for my votes. It is that good.

 

Thank you, JaneyRedd an Horse, for your praise! I appreciate the fact that you took the time to read it... and I love that you enjoyed it!

Doing my little happydance again!

And thanks, Snow. It seems quite a lot of people have whittled it down to four stories. I'm also stuck between four. How to choose?!

 

I enjoyed this as it showed that not everyone at Christmas time have the hollie jollies that most Holiday Stories take for granted. It showed that even damaged people can over come their problems to put others first and that some times you just don't know what is waiting for you to reach out.

A well written story to make voting harder for all of us.

 

Thank you! That's what I was aiming for.

Let me make the voting easier on you... vote for me! :excited:

Just kidding

 

An excellent story! On the technical side, it was well paced and had a nice flow to the sentence structure so that the words got out of the way and let the story shine through.

As for the story itself, it was nice and emotional (just what I like!) with plenty of drama and suspense. I could really feel for the characters, and I liked the little Christmas "miracle" at the end. These words from the story:

make me think Nikita has magically been cured, or at least is in remission again. Maybe I'm just a little optimistic, but I like to imagine an ultra happy ending like that.

My favorite part, however, is when Carter takes care of Mia's problem with her stepfather. When she read the newspaper article, I was thinking the whole time that Carter had gone in with guns blazing, which would have been a horrible solution to the problem because that would make him a murderer. I'm not sure if that misdirection was intended, but I just had to smile when it turned out that Carter had taken care of things legally and ethically.

In short, a very well written story which I'm sure will be a strong contender in the voting.

 

Thanks, DC! Appreciated. It is no warrior godess elf, but I had a lot of fun with the writing

 

Pixy - from my sisters notes...

She loved it!!!

Such a tale of honor, love, courage and hope coming togeather in one gem of a tale. She figures if you do not 'wind this hands down, you will score high in the finish"

 

I freely admit that I was so excited to read your story right after I finished creating the reading list.

You are so talented!!! I am so happy you entered this CAW. This is a wonderful offering that you have presented.

Thank you for taking the time to create and share with us!!!

 

Thank you, Snowy

Thanks, Jade! Thanks for going to so much trouble to make it a happy competition... good luck with your work with the voting.

 

This story was beyond what I expected. It could have been very cliche' but it wasn't. I can't believe English is second language. Great flow, great description and going on my short list.

 

While reading this, I kept thinking that I don't believe I have read anything by you in the past and that I MUST look for your other stories.

Then, reading the comments, I was FLABBERGASTED to learn that: a)This is your first story here, and b)English is not your first language!

Say WHAT????

You have MUCH to be proud of and I am so pleased that you have shared your talent here!

There are many other comments here that express my thoughts on your technical ability already, so I'll just sit back and applaud and encourage you to keep writing.

BRAVA!

(P.S. I absolutely LOVE your "location"! The 1965 R&H version is a life-long favorite, and I take GREAT joy in hearing our daughter humming that song these days!)

 

Thank you very much! You praise means a lot to me indeed! I'm glad you liked it

Thank you!

This is not actually my first story - I have a few others - but it is the first time I enter the CAW. If you want to read my other stories at some point, just PM me and I'll send you the link.

When you talk about the 1965 R&H version, are you talking about Roger and Hammerstein?

My grandparents had an old vhs tape with the Cinderella movie on it, and that's where I know it from. It is still one of my favourite versions of Cinderella ever. I still think the prince is handsome. I still want my own fairygodmother.

I googled it now; I didn't even know somebody had decided to re-do it. the things you miss, and then the things you learn!

 

A couple of writer friends of ours told us this was special. They weren't kidding. You could have very easily made this a nasty, dirty story, but you didn't. You made this a touching story about the good of mankind. You were able to express yourself eloquently in a language that had to be learned. You deserve to be here among the very best writers on the site. Great job, hornypixy.

 

Please do not forget that this is part of the CAW#14 writing competition.

You can find the rest of the entries and voting instructions here:

https://forum.xnxx.com/showthread.php?t=333871

Please read, enjoy and don't forget to vote for your three favourite entries

Thank you!!!
JadeM

 

Well after reading the comments from writers who in my mind is the best in what they do I feel that my opinion doesn't really matter. But I do have a few things to say,

"Ahem"

Well you have gotten into the mind of a male quite well, I could relate completely to Carter (knee is busted too, though not completely unusable).

I have been through the horror named Mills and Boon a few times, due to lack of reading material, I have a faint idea what romance is and I must admit, you gave a very difinitive description of romance in this tale.

Ahem

Right here and there I could get really anal and jabber about what I found wrong, but they are so minuscule that it will be silly of me to point them out.

Overall Pix you did another great job, hat off to you

 

Thank you! I haven't thought about this story in a long time. I'll have to read it again and see where I can adjust.

 

As I said to you before - what you need to do is turn this into a full-length novel. I'd buy it, that's for sure. Then I'd proudly tell everyone, I know her.

 

Aw! will you also tell them you met her on a porn site? :excited:

 

Yes, and I'll tell them that you have a gorgeous looking arse (that's "ass" in American). :excited:

So, young lady - get on that keyboard and get working!