Congratulations for this nice story, is very nicely wrote. While reading it i felt like being there. Looking forward for whatever is next.

 

Don't put yourself down. I think you do have the skills, maybe you just don't know it.

As for a graphic description being wrong for a love story; no offence but I would have to disagree. "Graphic" doesn't have to be "dirty". It can be gentle and loving, but still be graphic. Quick (and bad example): There is a huge difference between "grabbing a girls tits with lust", and "lovingly caressing her breasts". Also, and I know this is just my opinion, but if they have kept feelings bottled up for 30 years, and even after they found out how each other felt they waited days while gaining permission/getting "married", I would probably expect a certain amount of lust. Lust and love can definitely co-exist. I love/am in love with my girlfriend. I still lust after her as well.

Keep it up though. I will definitely read any prequels/sequels you write.

 

i thought it was brilliant. well done. cant wait for more to this.. keep it up.

 

Thank you for bringing this back to the top - it is definitely worth keeping on the front page

 

Panther,,,, that was a VERY GOOD STORY,,,,, but you kinda left us hanging.... what happened with Amy?

 

I don't wish to make promises I can't keep, but have just started bouncing around ideas for Shawn and Melissa's 1st anniversary. I would like to have the start of a sequel out by this Memorial Day.

I am still recovering from a total computer failure which trashed my hard drive, so I lost all notes on all previous stories and the ones I had in progress. It also took out my backup drive. So basically starting from scratch. I need to read this and reconstruct my notes on the characters.

Thanks for the continued interest in this story almost a year after I originally wrote it.

 

This is an awesome story. Your grammar is good, the sex scenes are still a bit rushed, but they're good. I understand you don't want to be repetitive with your writing, and that is highly commendable. A threesome with Amy, Shawn, and Melissa would have been awesome; and I hope to see one in the sequel, when you start writing again.

 

As mentioned in the thread for the sequel, part 2 of the sequel is in work. There were some negative comments about the threesome and I was weighing if I should go through with it. In the end, the more experienced readers and writers told me to follow my instincts on that subject and not be swayed by the readers.

Well as you probably could tell from part one of the sequel, I have decided which direction to take.

Thanks for your positive comments, they are much appreciated.

 

awesome

 

Great story I was hoping for the threesome as well, but stil overall was very well written. Love mixed with naughty perfect mix.

 

Whew....LONG story...

I loved the story too. I didn't realize I'd be reading for as long as I thought when I started this.
I agree that the 'consummation' at the end wasn't quite as 'hot' as I'd like to have read but still very nice.
As incest stories go I thought that this was pretty damned good. It was more a graphic love story.
The section adding 'Amy' to the whole thing was intriguing because a threesome is almost every guy's fantasy.
It almost made this story too good for the lucky couple....
I wish that these kinds of things could actually happen with the happiest results.....sigh....

 

THE AGE OF FIFTEEN (15) IS USED IN THIS STORY, AND NOTHING HAPPENS. BE FARE WITH YOUR RULES AND POSTS AS MODERATORS. THATS ALL I ASK. SORRY PANTHER68 NOTHING PERSONAL TOWARDS YOU.

 

5. You may not post any text featuring sexual character under 18 years old.

Hate to burst your bubble, but there is no sexual interaction between the two characters while they are in their teens. The prologue is merely a flashback to memories. Therefore it is within the rules. In fact, in the sequel there is a part where they 'age-played' and acted out some of their fantasies which was approved my one of the moderators prior to posting and was allowed because it was clear they were two adults acting out those fantasies.

 

1. THANKS FOR SHOUTING. WHAT HAPPENED? DID YOUR CAPS LOCK KEY GET STUCK?

2. "Be fare (sic)". It's "fair" not "fare". Please, put down the lubricant, step back from the keyboard, call a lawyer, and sue your school district.

3. While we're at it..."THATS (sic) ALL I ASK"...should be "that's".

Meathead, huh?

Hmmm.

 

My story, viewed with FireFox 45.1 chapter#1 looks to have some sort of formatting glitch, error or corruption etc.
Every paragraph and single sentences look like the example I pasted below. Font info at the beginning and end...Does everyone see this? If so, do we all see the same thing? How about using a different browser? Do Mac and Pc users see the same error?
Say I don't want to see these errors or formatting gobbily-gook, whatever it's called..is there anything the end-user could do to at least make it look/read normally? A quick-fix?
Just a bit curious, but don't know a fucking thing, about this sort of fucking thing. "

"[FONT=Arial, sans-serif]I became physically attracted to my sister Melissa when she was 15 years old edited for space---chestnut brown hair which went down to her waist.a[/FONT]"

 

@KindaSpun , the formatting glitches in this post happened after one of the upgrades to the website. I am fairly certain the problem exists with how it is saved on the server now and can not be fixed. I guess I could repost it so the format errors are not there. In the meantime my stories can also be viewed on the story side of the site. http://www.sexstories.com/profile754755/Panther68 . Thanks for taking an interest in my stories.

 

Great story,, keep em Cummin

 

Hi, you don't need to mess around with it, on my part. I was mostly just curious what it was....There is another story site (name escapes at the moment) that I'll go to once in a while. And when ya get into the older, archived stories, the amount of strange little character strings all over the page, makes it just about unreadable or not worth the effort. With a good story I'll copy+paste into text-edit and 'find replace' all the garbage. Seems to be inserted in between the word and its apostrophy (sp?) quotes. And I was mildly curious what the deal was on this site.
No worries. I used find-replace in text-edit to clean up Chapter 1 and am working on the rest of it now. As well as your others...Great stories! I like the longer stories, rather than the short ones. I enjoy getting into a good story-line and its sub-plots, using a one-handed keyboard/mouse control technique to navigate the pages, as my other hand is otherwise occupied!
I think I'll go finish reading yours right now...Thanks for the reply! Take it easy!