This is a story of a week that I took my daughter and her friend with me to one of my professional golf tournaments. The story takes some time for the sex scenes to develop. Please be patient, I believe it will be worth your wait.


My wife decided to take our youngest daughter with her to a seminar she was going to. That left me with our oldest daughter Amy. Amy was in her late teens and quite a looker. Not that I really looked at her that way, but, she had inherited her mothers best assets.


At five foot four, with an exceptionally well structured female body, she looked much older. Her red hair, freckled face and hot teen body was extremely exotic. She had perky 34-B cup breasts, I knew this, because I always took the girls shopping. Her ass was just right, nice and firm and really looked good in either her bikini, jeans or the skimpy boy shorts she wore around the house. If I wasn't her father, I definitely would have been having lurid thoughts about her.


Amy wasn't too thrilled about going with me to the tournament. That is, until I told her that there was a great mall that connected directly to the hotel we would be staying at. Once she realized that, her attitude changed.


She asked me if her best friend Michelle, or Shelly for short, could go with us. Since I would be at the golf course for most of the daylight hours, I figured it would be good for her to have a companion to help her pass the time. I agreed to let Shelly accompany us. Shelly was at the house so often that she called me dad or daddy instead of Mr. Thorn or just Thorn as I had told her to when she asked me how she should address me.


Shelly was a short blonde teen bombshell. She stood about five foot three, and weighed about a hundred pounds. I swear most of the weight was in her breasts. They were huge for a girl her size! She was extremely beautiful with pouty full lips and brilliant blue eyes. Her breasts weren't the only great asset, she had a great butt and very shapely legs also.


I loved looking at Shelly's hot body when she would come to the house. In the pool, her bikini barely covered her boobs and crotch. When she would sleep over, and we would lounge in the living room, she would wear a sheer night gown that showed her assets off quite admirably.


I usually wore loose boxers around the house in the evening, and it seemed she was always looking at me and more specifically at my crotch. When I would look her way, she would quickly shift her gaze. I was surprised my wife never commented about the way Shelly dressed around me, but I guess she just wasn't paying too much attention.


After getting everything cleared with Shelly's parents, Shelly came and spent the Sunday night before our trip. The excited girls packed their things, chatting and planing how they would spend the week. The next morning we loaded the SUV for the long drive and off we went. It would turn out to be one of the best weeks of my life!


I had booked a two bedroom suite at the Ritz Carlton that adjoined the mall. The girls were ecstatic when they saw the mall and the suite. It was a split bedroom suite. I had the king room and the girls had the two queen room on the opposite side of the suite. There was a large living area in the middle. Each bedroom had its own TV and bathroom.


The girls went to their room to change and hit the mall. I went to my room to change into my golf attire to head to the course to check it out. I waited in the living room for the girls to come out so I could give them some spending money and some ground rules for the stay.


Amy emerged from the bedroom first. She had on a mini skirt and a midriff baring top. From the sight of her perky nipples poking at the thin fabric, she was obviously braless. I had to admit to myself, she looked very hot. I was tempted to send her back into the room to put on a less revealing clothing or at least a bra, but I thought it better to leave it. I didn't want to start the stay out by putting her in a bad mood.


Shelly came out next. My jaw probably dropped as I gazed at her hot body. She was wearing a tight tube top that showed off her large breasts and a very short mini skirt.


Both girls had applied light make up and appeared much older than their late teen ages. Definitely jailbait if I'd ever seen it!


After setting the ground rules for the stay, I gave each of them fifty bucks for spending money, told them I would return in a couple hours and to be ready to go to dinner at around seven. I'd made reservations for us at a nice steak house in the mall. They agreed to everything and both of them gave me a kiss on the cheek as I left the room to head to the course.


Since it was Monday, the course was quite vacant. The tournament started on Thursday and most of the contestants had not arrived yet. There were a few guys out playing practice rounds, but I elected to walk the course and get a feel for the layout taking just my putter and a wedge. I'd play my practice round tomorrow. My regular caddie, Mike, wasn't due to arrive until late tonight anyway.


It took me about an hour to walk the front nine. I was hitting putts on the twelfth green when the beverage cart pulled up. I walked over to the cart intending on buying a bottle of water. A very attractive ponytailed brunette was at the wheel. The young lady, in her early twenties by my guess, was quite chatty.


From her chatter, I realized, she obviously was really into golf. She introduced herself to me, her name was Tammy. She was an aspiring female professional golfer.

"I know who you are." She said. "I recognize you from television!" She became excited and asked for my autograph. I signed her visor and she thanked me. "I get off at six, um, would you be interested in, um, watching me hit some balls. I would love some pointers from a top TOUR professional like you. Then maybe we could grab a bite?"


I thanked her for the offer, but told her I had my daughter and her friend along for the week and I had already told them we were having dinner at the steak house in the mall tonight.


"Ok, no problem." She was visibly disappointed. "I do have all day Wednesday off." She added hopefully.


"Tell you what," I said. "I have an early tee time in the Wednesday pro am. How about I watch you hit balls that afternoon? We could practice together."


She lit up like a chandelier. "Oh Thorn, really? That would be awesome!" She wrapped her arms around me and kissed my cheek. "It's a date then. See you Wednesday, the water is on me." She added.


I started to walk to the thirteenth tee and she called me back.


"Here." She said, handing me a cocktail napkin. "I wrote my number and address on this. Meet me at the house. I live on the seventeenth fairway at this course. We can take my personal cart right to the practice range. This course will be too busy on Wednesday."


She drove off, and I continued on the back nine. I tucked the napkin in my yardage book for safe keeping.


Back at the hotel, the girls were ready to go to dinner when I arrived back at the room. They both had changed into nice evening attire. Amy in a short green dress that I had given to her mom years ago. The dress accented her assets with a plunging neckline and was almost totally backless. Once again, it was obvious she had no bra on.


Shelly had a stunning little black dress on. It also had a plunging neckline and she was also braless. Her large boobs were barely covered by the material of the dress. It looked as though at any moment one, the other, or both might tits might pop free!


I went in my room, took a shower, and put on a pair of Tommy Bahama silk trousers and a nice Tommy Bahama silk shirt short sleeve shirt. I decided to go sans underwear myself.


Off to dinner we went. Two hot teenage girls and the older man.


We were seated in a nice semi round booth. I expected the girls would want to sit next to each other so I sat on one end of the booth giving them room to do so. I was wrong, Amy told me to slide over and sat on my left while Shelly scooted next to me on my right. I was sandwiched between two very hot teen girls.


The waiter came to take our drink order. I ordered a glass of Cabernet.


"Dad, why don't you order a bottle, we could all share?" Amy asked. At home, we often let the girls drink a glass of wine with dinner.


"Okay." I told the waiter to make it a bottle with three glasses.


He brought the wine as we were looking at the menu. I tasted it and gave my approval and he poured us each a glass. We ordered and then the girls excitedly told me of their mall exploring as we sipped the wine. The wine went down quicker than I expected, and we were soon on our second glass.


A second bottle was ordered and opened. The girls were getting giggly and thank goodness the salads arrived before a third glass was poured!


As we were eating our salads, I felt something caressing my right leg. It was Shelly's hand and it was stroking the inside of my upper thigh. As the stroking continued, it moved closer and closer to my hardening cock!


I glanced out of the corner of my eye at Shelly, but she continued eating her salad and chatting, as if nothing unusual was going on.


The salads were finished, another glass of wine was poured for each of us, and dinner was served. Now, with both her hands busy to eat the steak, Shelly's onslaught of my leg was put on hold.


We finished dinner and the girls decided they wanted desert. So desert was ordered. During the wait, the hand once again began it's caressing of my upper thigh. This time, as my cock grew inside my silky loose fitting trousers, her fingers started stroking my hardness. She traced the whole outline of my cock and rubbed a finger back and forth across the crown of my blood engorged cock head.


"Thank you for a wonderful dinner, daddy." Shelly leaned over to me and kissed my neck.


As she did so, her left breast rubbed against my bare arm. I glanced down and I could see her whole breast quite clearly as the loose material of her dress ballooned out. Just before she pulled away from the kiss, her dainty little tongue ran down my neck, sending chills through my body. At the same time, she took a firm hold of my cock through my trousers and began stroking it with more purpose.


For the first time in a long while, I was totally taken by surprise and wasn't sure what to do. So, I just sat there and enjoyed the feeling of having my hard cock stroked by this gorgeous teen.


Desert was served and we each ate with not much conversation. All the while, Shelly stroked me under the table. There was one moment that I thought I was was going to blow my load, but Shelly must have felt it too and stopped just in time to prevent a mess.


I signed the check and we left the restaurant. Both girls were tipsy to say the least, Amy more so than Shelly. Arm in arm I led them through the mall to the elevator. Shelly's large left breast pressing against my bare arm kept my cock hard and it visibly strained the silk material of my slacks.


In the elevator, Shelly slid in front of me when it stopped at the second floor to let a few passengers on. Her tight ass wiggled against my cock seductively as the elevator rose again. Once again it stopped and a few more entered. I was now backed into the corner of the elevator and this squeezed the girls closer to me. Shelly took advantage of the situation by reaching back and adjusting my cock so it fit in the crack of her ass.


Now, with my dick squeezed between her cheeks she pressed harder against me for the rest of the accent to the top floor. Slowly she rotated her hips against me and my cock grew to an enormous hardness against her seductive ass. As passengers exited on the earlier floors, we remained in the same position.


When the doors opened at our floor, Shelly took Amy by the hand and helped lead her to our room. I was in a bit of shock, and had to stop the doors from closing so I could exit behind them.


The girls were just entering the room when I arrived and Shelly held the door for me.


"I've got to pee!" Amy announced as she hurried to the bathroom in their bedroom.


"How was your elevator ride daddy?" Shelly inquired. "Better than the table action?" She added.


Before I could even think of how to answer, she stood on her tip toes. Then she wrapped her arms around my neck pressing those luscious boobs against my chest and gave me a full on mouth kiss, running her tongue along and around my lips.


"Thank you for a wonderful dinner." She said. "Good night. See you later." She released me and headed to their bedroom.


I was still standing just inside the door, once again in shock. "Good night Shelly." I managed to utter.


She stopped at the door of their room and turned. Then to my amazement, she shrugged both her shoulders and let her dress top fall. Both her beautiful breasts were exposed to me. She smiled a coy smile and winked. Then the turned and entered the room closing the door behind her.
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To be continued .......

 

Please do continue.

Yum.

 

Wow, great start I can't wait to read the rest. Please continue

 

SEXY. Loved how she ground herself into him and then took off her dress. CONTINUE THIS, T69.

 

keep going . good exercise for my imagination .

 

As the action builds I wait for the next installment.

 

Part Two: Taking my daughter and her friend to work for the week

Part two:


In somewhat of a daze, I entered my bedroom and closed the door. My mind was reeling with what Shelly had done with me. My cock was still rock hard and my balls were aching for release. I had often imagined what those luscious breasts would look like, and now, even though so briefly I had seen them, they would be burned in my mind forever. Just as I was about to undress, a soft knocking on my door came. My first thought was, 'Shelly'.


"Dad, can I come in?" Amy asked from the other side.


"Sure Honey, come on in." I answered. In a way, I was disappointed.


She entered the room. She was dressed in a new nightgown and it was quite see through. Just what I needed, another view of a hot teen body. I hoped she wouldn't notice the excited condition of my groin.


Her areola and dark pink nipples were clearly visible on her freckled breasts. Her auburn hair covered mons was prominent also. I had to concentrate to keep my gaze from lingering on those features.


"I just wanted to thank you for a great dinner, the spending money and say good night." She told me. "Shelly said she already thanked you and said goodnight. I didn't get a chance before, I had to pee so bad, I think the wine caused it." She was still a bit tipsy.


"Your welcome Honey, have a good sleep. We can sleep in, in the morning, I don't have to be to the course too early." Then I added. "We can get a nice breakfast in the morning before I leave."


She came to me and gave me a tight hug and a kiss on the cheek. She had to feel my hard cock pressing against her as she did this, but she didn't show that she noticed. I certainly noticed the firmness of her breasts and the heat from her teen body and it made my cock even harder. I thought I felt her wiggle her mons into me, but, it may have been my imagination.


I watched her cute firm ass, also clearly visible through the sheer material, as she left the room. She closed the door softly behind her. I took a deep breath and went into the bathroom and brushed my teeth and relieved myself. At least those actions brought my cock down to three quarters mast.


I took off my clothes and climbed into bed and turned off the light. If I was going to be able to sleep, I was going to have to pull one off, after all this over stimulation from the two teens.


I reached below the covers and began stroking my cock with my right hand as I thought of Shelly and all that had occurred tonight and the sight and feel of my own daughter's body, nearly nude against mine. I was in no hurry and was enjoying stopping and resuming my cock stroking to heighten the feeling.


I must have done this for a good fifteen or twenty minutes, when suddenly another soft knock at the door interrupted me. Amy, I figured.


"Come on in Honey." I turned the bedside light back on.


Shelly, instead of Amy, entered my room. "Hi daddy, need some help going to sleep?" She asked. She closed the bedroom door behind her. "The wine has Amy in a deep sleep and she's snoring. I had to leave the room."


Before I could answer, she pulled her sheer nightgown over her head and came to my bedside completely naked. Her large breasts were perfect. She was a true blonde, and had a small patch of soft blonde pubic hair on her mons. She reached down and caressed my hard cock through the sheet.


"Hmmm, seems like somebody is wide awake." She purred. "I know just the thing to help him sleep."


Before I could protest, she pulled the sheet back and climbed into bed next to me!


"Shelly," I hissed, "you can't, we can't, do this."


"Oh yes we can, and we will." She shot back.


Sliding down the mattress she took my erect penis in her small hands and stroked it. I was paralyzed with pleasure.


"So, this is what you look like." She spoke to my cock like it was a friend. "You're quite a handsome fellow and so hard. I've been waiting a long time to meet you."


Gently grasping my testicles she massaged them and rolled them with her fingers. "Mmmm, you two are very nice and quite swollen. I need to take care of you boys Too."


The stroking of my cock and massaging of my balls felt so good. I was reveling in the moment. Watching her work me over was very erotic. Next, she lowered her head and parted her pouty lips. Ever so slowly her lips encircled my cock head. It was like I was in a dream.


Her tongue darted out and licked around and across my cock. Then she lightly sucked and rotated her head as inch after inch of my throbbing, seven inch cock, disappeared into her warm wet mouth.


This went on for some time. She seemed very experienced at what she was doing. Each time I thought I might shoot my hot cum into her lovely mouth, she stopped and put pressure on just the right spots, until my cock and balls settled down.


She moved her head up to my face and began passionately kissing me. Our tongues joined together in a erotic dance as I returned her kisses.


I reached down and used my hands to cup her hefty breasts. Letting out a soft purr, she indicated her pleasure with what I was doing. Pinching her large nipples between my thumbs and fore fingers, they responded by becoming hard as erasers. Her breath began to come in short gasps and she started to moan. Obviously her nipples were sensitive and sent waves of pleasure to her pussy.


I moved a hand to her pussy. I felt the soft pubic hair and ran my fingers over it. She responded my pressing her crotch into my hand. Sliding my fingers lower, I parted her soft pussy lips. Her clitoris was swollen and I softly touched and rubbed it. She moaned into my mouth as we kissed.


Spreading her lips further, I inserted my middle finger inside her wet hole. Breaking our kiss, she moaned loudly as I slowly finger fucked her and rubbed her pleasure button. She began to quiver and shake as the waves of pleasure washed over her young body. She again sought out my mouth with hers and kissed me hard as she had her first climax.


Once again she broke our kiss. Then she rolled onto her back. I slid down and she parted her legs in anticipation. I buried my face in her sweet teen pussy and used my tongue to flick her clit. Using the special method I'd learned long ago, from the girl that took my virginity, I slowly traced the capitol letters of the alphabet on her swollen love button. She came again before I finished "B". At the same time, my arms stretched up to her tits, and I resumed my pinching of her hard nipples.


Her lashing and shaking continued, along with her loud screams and moans. This had me fearful, that at any moment, Amy would open the door to investigate the commotion. My only salvation was Shelly telling me that the wine had put her in a deep sleep.


With my face covered with her creamy cum, I moved up too kiss her. Before I could, she grasped my face with her hands and licked her juices from my lips. Once she'd done that, we again kissed very passionately.


"Now for the main event." She announced as our lips parted. "I want Mr. Hard Handsome Dick in my little cuny."


"I don't think that's a good idea." I weakly tried to keep from fucking this young teen hottie. I knew deep inside that it wasn't going to stop, but, I had to at least try for my mind's sake.


"Your right daddy, it's not a good idea, it a fantastic idea." She shot back. "Now stick that hard dick inside me right now!" She spread her legs wide inviting me to impale her.


I knelt between her outstretched legs and lowered myself. My hard cock slid in her tight teen pussy with little resistance.


"Oh yes!" She exclaimed. "Fuck me, fuck me deep and hard."


I began thrusting my cock in and out of her wet tight pussy. She met my thrusts and begged me to fuck her harder.


"Oh God yes, fuck me hard, fuck me harder. Slam that cock deep inside my hot cunt." She commanded me and I obliged.


I was so afraid of cumming inside her, that I somehow was able to keep from exploding. Her pussy felt so good. She used her kegel muscles and milked my cock as I began to slowly fuck her hard and deep. It brought back memories of an older woman that seduced me when I was a teen.


She stopped me through gasps. "Let me turn over. I want you to fuck me doggy style. I love getting fucked doggy style."


Oh yes, I thought, my favorite position. She got on all fours and I kneeled behind her. Spreading her butt cheeks, I couldn't help admiring the great view of her tight ass and beautiful pussy. As I entered that sweet pussy once more, I reached a hand to a big boob and took her hard nipple between my thumb and forefinger and tweaked it once more. My other hand went under her tight belly and I massaged her love button as I slowly fucked her from behind, immensely enjoying the feeling of every long slow thrust.


"Oh, fuck, oh fuck yes." She chanted. "That feels so fucking good, fuck, fuck, fuck, ahhhhhh, yeeeessss." Once again she came.


I fucked her long and hard on all fours. Then she dropped flat to the mattress. I used my hands to spread her ass cheeks once again as I pounded her into the mattress her with vaginal muscles squeezing my cock with each stoke.


"Oh yes, daddy cum inside me, shoot your hot cum in my hot pussy." She instructed me. "Oh God it feels so fucking good, cum inside me now!"


I stopped fucking her. "I can't Shelly, I don't want to get you pregnant."


"Damnit, I'm on the pill, now fuck me and shoot your hot cum inside me now!" She almost screamed at me.


"I can't." I repeated. "I won't."


"Ok," her voice softened, "I'll turn over. You fuck me that way and when you're going to cum, pull out and shoot your hot jiz on my stomach and tits, okay?" She asked.


"Okay." I answered. "I'll do that." I agreed to her new terms.


She turned over on her back and spread her legs wide. Once again I entered her sweet pussy and slowly began thrusting deep inside her.


"Oh yes daddy, that's it. Harder, faster, yes, yes, fuck me, fuck me and cum on me." She urged me on.


"Oh fuck, ahhh yess, I'm going to cum soon." I pumped her harder and faster. "Yes, yes, I'm going to pull out now."


Just as I made the move to pull my pulsing dick from her wonderful pussy, she hunched up and wrapped her legs around me, effectively locking us together. My cock was still deep inside her hot cunt!


Her kegel muscles took over and milked me for all their worth. I was helpless to prevent the inevitable explosion of hot sperm that spewed forth through my cock as my balls contracted and jumped.


"Uggg, Oh, arggggh ahhhh, fuck yessss!" I moaned as I began filling her with baby making sperm bullets.


"There, was that so bad?" She asked as she relaxed her legs and let them fall to the mattress. "Now, you can finish the job and fuck me some more"


I fucked her hard as I continued to shoot streams of cum inside her. Finally, my balls stopped pumping and a last small spurt of sperm left my cock as her vaginal muscles were contracting and squeezing every last drop out. I rolled off her and my cock made a slurpy sound as it popped from her pussy.


"That's much better. Now that we have that out of the way, you won't have to worry next time." She purred to me.


Scooting to the edge of the bed she got up, cupping her hands to her pussy, and headed to my bathroom.


"Oh my," she giggled, "you have the record! Most cum in my pussy. I've never had this much inside me ever. I can barely keep it from oozing out."


I heard the bathroom sink faucet turn on, then her relieving herself.


As I laid on the bed, waiting for what would come next, I couldn't help but think about this fantasy come true. I had just had sex with my daughter's best friend. A girl I had fantasized about, but never dreamed would become a reality.


Soon she returned with a hot wash cloth. I was prepared for her to use the cloth on my semi hard cock, but instead, she dropped her head to it and took it in her mouth. She effectively cleaned my cum covered dick and then licked the small pool of my cum that had formed on my body. Only when she had finished that did she use the now luke warm cloth to finish cleaning me up.


"Oh daddy, you taste so good. I'm going to have to have a full load in my mouth. Yummy!" She exclaimed.


She got up once again and returned the wet cloth to the bathroom. Then she returned. Instead of retrieving her gown and returning to her room, she crawled back in bed with me.
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Cumming soon, Part Three.

 

Amy and Shelly are very good daughters, but Daddy is going to have ease up and let nature take its course.

Now are they really on the pill or is that a little white lie?!

 

Cant't you just write normal English?

What is it with the American obsession for the word "would"?

"I loved looking at Shelly's hot body when she would come to the house. In the pool, her bikini barely covered her boobs and crotch. When she would sleep over, and we would lounge in the living room, she would wear a sheer night gown that showed her assets off quite admirably."

"I loved looking at Shelly's hot body when she came to the house. In the pool, her bikini barely covered her boobs and crotch. Whenever she slept over and we lounged in the living room, she wore a sheer night gown that showed her assets off quite admirably."

Is it too much to ask that writers write in English? Why do you write in the conditional when describing actions in the past?

 

In American English, this usage is an acceptable literary conceit.

It implies that the event occurred habitually. Example: Every summer, we would sojourn to the cliffs and tan upon the strand.

Give the guy a break. This story is really good.

 

I totally agree, Clarise, though not about it being a literary CONCEIT!

It is the same in British English but your example does not mirror the example given. It is a totally different grammatical structure. You don't use the word "when" in your example. In the case of habitual actions it would be more correct to use "whenever" along with the past tense.

Nice to see that, in the absence of the departed writers, the literary standards of the forum are being downgraded.

 

Well, holy shit.

Different literary standards apply in different places.

If we view proper grammar, word use, spelling, punctuation, and sentence structure on a scale where 10 is "Nobel Prize for Literature" and 1 is txtspk, scoring a 6 or higher is good for this place.

I give this story a solid 7 in overall world quality and something in the high 8s/low 9s for here.

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So now we have a "Yum" from ejls, a "really good" from Clarise and an 8/9 from wsf. What odds do you reckon I could get on Thorn being the next mod? Don't really see much difference between this story and several thousand others on the site, though there are several thousand others that beat this one by miles.

 

At least he wrote. How else is anybody supposed to learn if they never practice? Keep your fights in the relevant threads, and stop making this guy the scapegoat for everything that's wrong with the forum. What do you WANT from people, Hector? I'm honestly confused. If people don't post, they're letting the community die and being unwelcoming. If they do post, heaven help them because their post is going to be ripped to pieces by you.

 

I don't see the point of top writers on the forum making out what is little more than an average outpouring to be some kind of minor masterpiece. It is basically "suck and fuck" with no story to it. It's the stuff that unemployed wankers jerk off to while sitting in front of their smeg-covered computer screens. I would at least like people to have some kind of story in their "story".

 

I hear what you're saying - DC's signature always said 'If you like your smut hot with a side order of plot.' I agree - a story should have more than just a cumshot. I think it's nice that they're encouraging people, though. My first story here was also very much just a glorified sex scene. It takes time, participation and comments to learn. That's not a bad thing.

 

Pedantic.

Yes, there is always a longer, more stilted way of writing anything.

In American English, neither when nor whenever are necessary. Would suffices. That is the point.

Next you're going to start bickering over Oxford commas and trailing prepositions. Do you know where you're going to? STRIKE! Ungrammatical!

Sheesh.

Post a fucking story or something.

 

:rose:Thank you, hornypixy, wantsomefun, clarise and others that have come to my defense. I'm not a professional writer, I'm a professional athlete and a damned good one at that. I was brought to this site by a good friend and until now, have had no critique such as Wee Hector has done.

My my story does have a plot, and a good one. I'm not divulging it here. It will develop with the story. Many times, true stories don't have a plot, because they just happen! I will in the future be writing a fictional story. It will have a definite plot and I hope what will be considered a good one.

I write these stories mostly when I'm flying from event to event and have idle time on my hands. It beats watching dumb movies on the commercial jets and sleeping when I fly private.

To Wee Hector I say "if you don't enjoy my stories, don't read them!" Keep your comments on your side of the pond and I'll try to take your criticism for what it's worth. In the meantime, I'll do with you, Wee Hector, just as I do with hecklers on the golf course when I'm competing in an event, ignore them. That said, I do appreciate the criticism and will try to be aware of it in the future.

Anyway, Wee Hector aside, I hope everyone else will enjoy part three when I post it.


Thorn69

 

Amateur or not, keep going.

 

+1

I'm not here looking for Nobel Prize winners or just 'wank' stories.

This is very readable as is and I enjoy the storyline. I look forward to the next chapter.