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Jake Greenman sits in his music theory class, bored out of his mind and fiddling with a guitar to try and offset the anxious diffusion of young hormones throughout his toned, warm body. His brown hair, straight and thin in complexion, brushes lightly over his forehead and swoops back across his scalp, and he has to flip it back periodically. His guitar playing is a bit sporadic, his smooth, white fingers caress the fingerboard and glide superciliously up and down the sub-par guitar. He is around 5’8”, or so, and has a filled out body with an evidently firm butt that protrudes out and milky white skin housing ample thick muscles. He’s sitting on the round table in the middle of the room, his yellow and black mesh athletic shorts hanging down and sliding up so the top of his thighs are visible for a few inches before the shorts regain their cloaking dominance. His legs are similar to his arms, except predictably hairier, just the right amount for a sophomore boy. His thighs, after a few inches, are pretty bare, signifying that he’s not yet a man, but his developing body is in its later stages. His beaten down Nike sneakers are almost falling off, and his body sways in rhythm with the heavy blues he’s playing.
As he jams out, his friend Robby Kaplan listens, sitting on a stool a few feet away, across from Jake. Jake’s ebullient demeanor relaxes Robby, although he’s an atypically relaxed kid for a high-school sophomore. He feels comfortable, and runs his long and bony fingers through his short spiky hair, pausing for a moment to examine his naturally tan skin and almost hairless, yet sculpted arms. Robby’s around 5’11, but because he’s sitting on the chair and Jake on the table Jake towers over Robby’s slender figure. Robby’s tan legs, enveloped in a pair of thin and tight cargo shorts, are crossed at the ankles, and they are significantly hairier and tanner than Jakes’. Robby is wearing a gray t-shirt, which almost obscures his often subdued sex appeal, which manifests itself in the form of his hip musician’s look. He picks up a bass guitar and complements Jake’s aggressive blues playing, with a detached look on his serious facade and the thumping of the bass reverberating throughout his body. “Hey Jake, play that in E, we can practice the blues we’re supposed to learn for guitar club.” Jake looks down at Robby as he speaks, bouncing his body up and down as he keeps playing, a nonstop burst of youthful energy. “Got it Robby, Robby, dum dum dum, Robby, Robby.” Jake sings his friend’s name out, his hyped up body convulsing slightly. Robby smiles at Jake and turns the riff around, still complimenting his friend’s playing but letting his bass reverberate a bit longer in the quiet classroom.
Jake stops after a couple minutes and lets the guitar rest against the wall, and itches his left leg with his left hand as he talks to Robby. “Dude, I really think I’m screwed for the chemistry thing tomorrow, I don’t even know what it’s on man, fuckkkkkkkkkk.” He lets his last word drag out while stretching his creamy arms over his head and rubbing his biceps. Robby smiles, his friend often freaks out and blows things out of proportion. “Is this last period Jake? You can come over after school and we’ll study, Max and I went over the stuff yesterday, it isn’t too bad.” Jake looks a bit relieved, and stands up to stretch his legs out. “Yeah this is last period, and thanks brooooo, we can leave in a few minutes, I need to take a piss first.” Jake scampers out of the room and into the bathroom to go pee as Robby puts down his bass and begins to pack up. He’s not nervous about Jake coming over, they hang out all the time, but there’s something quivering in the back of his mind, some apprehension about his friend being in his room and exploring his stuff. Robby shrugged it off, “it’s my best friend Jake” he thinks, feeling a bit better but still anxious about being close to Jake when his parents aren’t home. These feelings don’t reveal themselves in his demeanor, he appears as outwardly sagacious as ever.
Jake comes to the door and motions for Robby to follow him outside. Robby complies, grabbing his messenger bag and swinging it over his slender but defined chest. He walks outside the door and the two boys walk toward the exit of the school. Jake says goodbye and hugs a couple of pretty girls in short shorts, and Robby just nods at all of them, smiling mysteriously. They burst through the swinging doors like Ulysses on the Aegean, and Jake’s confident and swaggering body leads the way through the crowds of chattering kids. Once they bypass this and start walking toward Robby’s apartment, around 10 blocks away, they start talking again. Robby is an honest kid, even if he is a bit reserved, and he trusts Jake, so he asks with trepidation, “hey Jake, have you ever been with that Sara girl? It’s totally cool if you have been, I just think she’s, she’s where it’s at man.” Robby blushes slightly and avoids Jake’s eyes. Jake chuckles and responds, “well Robby if it makes you feel better I’ve never been with her, even though Max has, and you’re fucking right, she’s banging!” Jake laughs and simulates thrusting motions with his hips. Robby laughs but is still a bit embarrassed, but chooses to let it slide for now, after all there’s no sense in him telling Jake that he thinks about Sara quite a bit, especially when he masturbates.
A few minutes later they arrive at Robby’s house. Jake is sweating mildly, a consequence of his early morning basketball practice. They go upstairs and Robby opens the door, tossing his shoes off and walking into his room and dropping his book bag on the floor by the closet. Jake follows his lead, talking as they walk to the bedroom. “Dude I’m beat from basketball, I wish I could shower right now. Your parents aren’t home?” Jake inquires, and Robby thinks to himself that it might be kind of cool to have his friend shower at his house, not in a weird sense or anything, it would probably just make them even closer friends. “Dude if you need a shower take one, I can lend you some clothes if you need them. And nah they’re not, both working. You want a drink man?” Robby walks out toward the kitchen, leaving Jake in his room, and Jake calls out a bit louder as Robby’s silhouette arcs around the corner hallway, “Really dude? You don’t mind? Dude I need like, a full change of stuff, you sure that’s cool? And yeah, get me some vodka bitch!” Jake laughs at this, and he’s only half-kidding. Robby shouts back “if you want some take it man, we have like 10 bottles of it. And I don’t care, take some stuff from my closet.” Robby sort of likes the idea of Jake wearing his clothes, and he wonders if they would even fit him.
Jake walks back into the bedroom with a red cup of orange juice that looks suspiciously watered-down. Robby looks at the cup and smiles slyly at his friend and sits down on his desk chair. “So you wanted to shower? Here, take some clothes.” Robby stands up and walks to his closet, and pulls out a t-shirt, some athletic shorts, and asks Jake, “you need boxers too man?” Jake chugs his drink before responding, and burps and says “yeah dude, these are fucking sweaty and halfway up my crack!” Robby lets out a mock sound of disgust and pulls a pair of Quiksilver boxers from his drawers. He hands the pile of clothes to Jake and says “shower’s all yours buddy, don’t get too many white stains on my walls.” He laughs and Jake puts the glass down and lightly hits Robby’s shoulder. “Shut up Robby, I’ll fucking repaint the bathroom if I want too!” He smiles and shuts the bathroom door behind him, leaving Robby alone in his room.
Robby laughs, he knows Jake’s overblown personality well, and knows that much of what he says is silly male-posturing and bravado. Nevertheless, he finds it curiously right to be joking with Jake about sexual things. Robby rubs his long and thin fingers together, a bit bored, and horny too, wishing he could squeeze in a quick jerk before Jake was done. “Hey Jake,” Robby raps against the bathroom door to get his friend’s attention, “how about you paint the bathroom and I’ll take care of my stuff out here?” Robby’s voice quivers a bit, he’s nervous about asking this. The water is running in the bathroom and Jake shouts over it to be heard. “Chill Robby, I’ll be out in a minute anyway, I’m not actually going to bust one out in your shower dude.” Jake laughs and a minute later Robby hears the water shut off. The knob of the bathroom door turns, and Robby glances up from his position on the desk chair to see Jake walking out with just boxers on, holding his other clothes in his arms. He offers an explanation: “It’s hot in here and this shirt is too small.” Robby glances at Jake’s glistening body for a split second, but manages to snap out of it and motions toward his closet. Jake pulls on the shorts Robby lent him and procures another shirt from the pile. Now dressed, Jake plops down on Robby’s bed with his legs spread apart, “man I’m so bored, I don’t want to study for that test at all, and my hands are too sore to jam anymore.” Robby laughs, “well they’re probably not too sore for something else, you horndog.” Jake knows what he’s talking about and shoots Robby a dirty smirk from the bed. “Wow, look at this, Robby finally loosening up and talking some smack! Whatever dude, you’re the one that probably beats it to Sara every night.” Robby blushes profusely, and is unable to look Jake in the eyes. After a minute of Jake chuckling, Robby looks his friend in the eyes and says softly, “look, Jake, that’s probably true, I think about her all the time, don’t laugh at me man.”
Jake pauses after this, unsure of how to react. Robby is his best friend, but his baser instincts are to make fun of him first. “Really? I mean, really Robby? I had no idea you liked her man, I thought you just wanted to pound her. Do you want me to try and hook you guys up sometime? I mean, you have a chance with her, you’ve hooked up with Charlotte before, and they’re like best friends.” Robby finally looks back at Jake, still feeling quite awkward, and manages to grin sheepishly. “Um, well, eh, yeah, I like her a lot Jake, she’s so cute and pretty. I’d really appreciate it if you did that, I’d have no idea how to pay you back. And Jake, I still do want to pound her.” Robby smirks at this, and Jake nods back, knowing just how sexually appealing Sara’s curvaceous body is. Robby gets up from the chair and grabs his laptop, sitting on the edge of the bed. “Dude, I want to show you something. You know how Max went out with Sara for a bit? Well she sent him some, um, interesting, pictures.” Jake smirks, knowing what Robby is implying, and he scrambles over to where Robby is and peers over his shoulder.
Robby clicks a couple buttons and a picture of Sara, a stunning dark haired girl, appears on the screen. She’s not wearing a top or a bra, and she has a light blue thong on that barely covers her tight, virgin pussy. Robby scans through a couple pictures, one of Sara bending over, and another of her licking a lollipop. Jake’s eyes are transfixed on the screen, and after a minute he manages to speak. “Robby, I love Max right now, these pictures are so hot. Do you seriously jerk to these all the time? I don’t blame you dude.” Jake rubs his thighs over his shorts, getting pretty turned-on, and his smooth arms caress his muscular thighs as he stares at the screen. Robby looks at Jake as he speaks, knowing his friend is as turned on as he is. “Dude, she’s just, wow, every time I look at these I go crazy. And yeah, pretty much every night, I can send them to you so you can too man. Wow, how jealous are we of Max? He’s such a lucky asshole, I think she even blew him a couple times.” Robby moans as he says the word “blew,” the jealous seeping from his pores, and Jake laughs. Jake’s more open about this sort of thing generally, although Robby is surprisingly relaxed because he’s talking about his crush, which he doesn’t usually get to do so freely.
Jake leans back on the bed and Robby pulls his desk chair up to the foot of it, so Robby could be able to look up Jake’s shorts, if he was so inclined. Jake answers methodically for once, taking his time in selecting his words. “Well, I’m not jealous of him, I’ve gotten plenty of girls, although Sara looks pretty amazing in those pics dude. I never heard that rumor about her blowing him though, but if you say it it’s probably true. Hey Robby, is it just me or did looking at those fucking turn you on too?” Jake blushes a bit, but manages to regain his confident air. Robby laughs “Yeah, yeah, I’m horny Jake, but you are too, so whatever. I wonder how Max got her to do it. I heard a rumor about him being, you know, big down there. Maybe that was it? I don’t know, does a huge one really turn a girl on that much?” Robby blushes now, sex questions are okay with him, but asking his friend things about penises is too awkward for his nervous mind to handle without giggling.
Jake isn’t thrown off by Robby’s question, and rests his adorable hands on his thighs, looking for some excuse to play with himself as soon as possible, as he answers. “Dude, I don’t know about that, we’re on the tennis team together, and from what I’ve seen, his package is pretty much average.” Jake blushes as he says this, and feels compelled to add an addendum to justify his statement. “You know, because the team showers together and stuff, not because of weird shit. But yeah, I don’t know dude, I mean, mines obviously massive, but I don’t think girls care unless it’s really small or really big you know?” Robby laughs and puts his feet up on the bed, so they’re almost touching Jakes’. “Nah, I understand, really though? So then I guess it’s not because of that. Do you guys like, actually compare, in the locker rooms? Max is pretty cocky though, wouldn’t you expect him to be packing a big one? And shut up Jake, I don’t need to hear you brag about your...equipment.” Jake lets his feet slide out a bit more, so they’re only inches from Robby’s’. He likes the idea of being close to his friend. “Yeah man, we all shower together, it’s only natural that we compare. I mean, 20 naked guys, there’s bound to be some competition. And Max talks a big game, but it’s all talk. I remember the first time I saw his I laughed at him for being such a cocky bitch and having a normal sized tool. Me on the other hand...” Jake chuckles to himself and shoots Robby another slightly arrogant look. “Whatever Jake, whatever, at least I know Max is all talk, that makes me feel better, and you’re probably all talk too dude, your so cocky. But it’s okay, I’ll forgive you if you can hook me up with Sara and she helps me cum.” Robby laughs and Jake joins in, both boys reveling in the raw teenage sexuality they feel so comfortable in expressing.
At this point neither boy is consciously aware of their baser instincts, and aren’t inclined toward any sexual thoughts about the other. Granted, both of them conjured a mental picture of Max when they were talking about him, and Robby imagined Jake’s when he was bragging about it, but that’s about all. A flickering flame.
Jake decides he’s horny, and he has no problem broadcasting these feelings to his friend. “Trust me Robby, trust me, my cockiness is warranted, trust me. And no problem dude, it’s gonna happen, Robby’s gonna get some from Sara, Robby’s gonna get some from Sara!” Jake chides his friend slightly and keeps talking, “man, I’m so fucking horny, don’t you have any porn around here?” Robby is shocked and pleased at once, and he replies, “dude, I can’t wait, if it actually happens I’ll love you forever Jake. And um, porn? Um, well, you know, we have those pics of Sara, but why? It’s two guys here dude.” Jake smiles, and adjusts his shorts a little bit to accommodate his still soft penis. “It’ll happen Robby, see,” Jake shifts the computer so Robby can clearly see a picture of Sara bending over and licking a lollipop, “She’s going to make you jizz in her mouth man. And yeah, fuck it, I know you’re horny too, why don’t we jerk? Grab a pillow and hide your junk!” Jake takes a pillow from behind Robby’s bed and tosses it to him. He takes another pillow for himself and scrunches his legs up and places the pillow over his crotch. “This okay with you Robby?” Robby is nervous, but willing to follow his friends’ lead. It’s a queen size bed, and Robby jumps on the bed and lies next to Jake, about 5 feet away from him, both boys facing the open computer showing the same enticing picture of Sara.
Robby smiles at Jake, and begins to speak in short gasping sentences, “Dude, I’m so nervous, it’s not like I usually just jerk it with another guy next to me. Whatever, I’ll follow your lead, just don’t show me Little Jake alright?” Robby forces a grin onto his face, his heart racing with anticipation. Jake laughs, he’s unwilling to whip it out in front of Robby anyway, because he’s truly a bit insecure about the size of his penis. Jake’s hand slides under the pillow and presumably under his shorts as well. Robby remembers something and gives Jake a dirty look. “Dude, you’re wearing my shorts, don’t get them too messy or anything.” Jake laughs, “I’ll try not too man, but I’m not making any promises. Hey Robby, how big is yours anyway?” Robby looks over at Jake, amazed he’d actually have the audacity to ask that. “Um, uh, exc, wai, what? Dude I’m not answering that.” Jake laughs. “Dude you pussy, I bet yours is like 2 inches on a good day!” This conversation is making both boys horny, and Robby slides his slender fingers down below the pillow covering his crotch as well.
Robby engages Jake in some more silly banter. “Look Jake, you have no idea how big mine is, and it’s not like you’re going to find out, I’ll save that information for Sara’s soft, moist lips. Besides, it’s definitely bigger than yours.” Jake gasps at this, laughing a little bit. “Dude if you’re so sure about that then let’s fucking compare our packages already and see who really is the biggest, unless of course, you’re afraid!” Robby smiles but gets a bit nervous, it’s not like every day his best friend dares him to whip his dick out. Jake is nervous too but he’s alleviating it by talking more. “Puuusssyyyy, come on Robby, we’re friends, it’s cool.” Robby laughs, and figures he can meet Jake halfway by removing his shirt, which he does, slowly and sensually, revealing a tan and skinny yet toned chest and hard nipples. “Happy now Jake? You get to see half of me naked.” Jake smiles and does the same as Robby, rubbing his nipples after his shirt is off. “Ahhh that feels refreshing, and damn Robby, your nipples are already hard, you must really want to jerk it dude. Come on man, let’s just compare, I want to see how much smaller you are than me!” Robby is caught between the nervousness of his mind and the horniness of his penis, and isn’t sure of what to do. “Shhh Jake, let it go, I dunno, it seems to weird to me. At least I’m probably bigger than Max right?” Robby looks over at Jake and glances down at his smooth chest before looking him in the eyes. “I don’t know Robby, are you bigger than 6 inches? That’s average and that’s how big Max is, that stupid little shit. “ Jake laughs and looks at Robby, curious about the answer. “Well, um, yeah, I think so at least, are you?” Jake lets his fingers glide further down his shorts and under them, “fuck yeah I am Robby!”
Robby is silent for a minute or two as he concentrates intently on the erotic picture of Sara on the screen. His hand moves discreetly at first inside his shorts, but then the pace begins to quicken and a contorted expression stagnates on his face. “Hey Jake, having fun over there?” Robby says to break the silence and Jake replies, “Oh man yeah dude, this feels amazing, I’m rock hard and I’m thinking about Sara riding me and moaning.” Robby lets a soft moan escape by accident. “Sorry dude, good mental picture I guess. I’m hard too.” Jake laughs and nods in approval before sliding his athletic shorts down to his ankles along with his boxers. Jake’s legs and lower thighs are fully visible to Robby, and only a two foot region over his crotch is covered by his pillow, serving as quite flimsy barrier. Robby’s lack of protest signals his acceptance of what Jake just did, and Jake continues to beat off, even faster and more intensely now. Robby figures he might as well just follow Jake’s lead, and he’s too horny to think otherwise. He shuffles off his shorts and boxers too, letting them rest on his ankles. He lets out a sigh, “ah, that’s so refreshing Jake, good call dude, and I love watching myself jerk off too.” Jake laughs. “Yeah Robby, it’s always fun to see what’s going on down there. You thinking about Sara too?” Robby moans in concurrence. “Oh my God Jake yeah I am, I’m thinking about her sucking my cock and my balls and jerking me off. Dude i’m so horny right now.” Robby’s mind is fixated on Sara’s picture, distorting his sense of judgment, although he isn’t aware of that.
Jake figures that Robby is so horny he can ask him anything and get away with it. “Hey Robby, I’ve been wondering, don’t freak out on me now, but how big are you really? I mean, I know you’re smaller than me, but I wonder if you’re bigger than Max or not.” Robby breaks his focus to answer Jake. “Dude I’m telling you I don’t measure, I mean, if you want to see I’ll show you I guess, then you can tell me if I’m bigger than Max or not. How big is yours anyway?” Jake tenses up, surprised that Robby was willing to do this, and he gets a bit shy. “Um, well, you’ll see how big mine is dude, should we just like, toss the pillows away at the same time?” Jake keeps jerking, shifting glances between the picture of Sara and Robby’s legs. Robby glances over at Jake’s naked body, barely concealed, and nods in agreement. “Yeah, it’s okay with me I guess, we’re just curious right? Let’s go at the same time, one, two, three.” Robby removes the pillow from his crotch and tosses it off the side of the bed, revealing the rest of his body to Jake. Jake does the same at the same time, and both boys stare at each other as this happens. Robby and Jake are both naked, and their dicks are finally free and open for the other one to see. Robby’s penis is around 7 inches, possibly a bit bigger, around 7.5 or so. It’s thick and somewhat tan, and is curved upwards slightly. It’s circumcised head has a dark pinkish hue, and Robby let’s it stand there for Jake to see, his hands at his sides. Jake’s penis is smaller, probably 6.5 inches, and is fully straight with a light pink circumcised head and a nice dark bush of pubes. His whole crotch is quite white, and his penis is lighter than Robby’s. Both of their ball sacs appear to be about the same size, although Jake has a bit more hair on his.
Jake speaks first. “Damn Robby, wow, that thing is way bigger than I thought!” Jake is a bit emasculated, but he’s so amazed by his friend’s package he doesn’t seem to care. “Seriously man, wow, congrats, you’re definitely bigger than our friend Max.” Robby smiles, finally feeling like the confident one. “Well Jake, you talk a pretty big game, and yours isn’t exactly small, but it looks like you can’t talk anymore shit to me from now on. Dude, we don’t need to pillows now, let’s keep jerking. I so wish Sara was here, I’d even let her do the two of us at once.” Jake blushes a bit, still feeling sad that he’s smaller. “Robby you’d really let her jerk us both of at once? Thanks for being so charitable dude, but I think I get enough. Still, that would be pretty hot, I wish a girl was jerking me off now too.” Robby keeps stroking his big penis and replies to Jake, “Yeah why not? It wouldn’t bother me, it’s just you Jake. Oh man, oh Sara, Sara, mm fuck dude you’re right I really need someone to help me out right now too.” Robby and Jake both have one thing rising subconsciously in their minds, and they’re both scheming of ways to possibly “help” the other one out.
Jake breaks the silence. “Man Max would be jealous if he saw ours, we’re both bigger than him dude. And, you know, I’m just thinking, we both really want handjobs right now right? Why don’t we, you know? We’ll never tell anyone and it would feel so good Robby...” Robby looks at Jake, shocked at first but somewhat intrigued. “Ummm, Jake you’re so gay man. But, um, I really really want a handjob now dude. I don’t know, isn’t it too weird? It’s like, your hand on my cock dude.” Jake shrugs and moves closer to Robby. “Dude, just tell me how this feels, okay?” Jake’s around two feet away from Robby, and he reaches over with his left hand and lets it rest on Robby’s hard cock. Robby’s whole body quickly shudders with pleasure and Jake lets his hand stroke Robby’s cock up and down a couple times. “So, how was that?” Robby smiles and responds. “Wow, Jake I feel so gay but that felt so good, keep going man.” Robby shuts his eyes and Jake let’s his hand jerk Robby faster now, his other hand fondling his own rigid penis. Robby moans louder now and shuts his eyes. “Oh Sara, mmm Sara, jerk my big dick Sara, you want it so bad you dirty slut.” Jake likes how he’s pretending it’s his crush, and Jake guides Robby’s free right hand over to his thigh, letting it rest there as Jake jerks off Robby. Robby takes the hint and lets his fingers creep up to Jake’s penis, slowly rubbing his balls at first before sliding onto the shaft and rubbing Jake’s rock hard manhood.
The boys continue to jerk each other off, finally comfortable with each other and giving in completely to their sexual desires. Jake and Robby both moan Sara’s name, and they both jerk even faster. It’s Jake who initiates the next step of action. “Oh man, wow, Robby, this is so good, your hands are so smooth. Want to blow me dude? I’ll return the favor.” Robby laughs as his hand continues to stroke Jake, and he considers it for a moment before simply smiling at his friend and shuffling over to face Jake. He’s on his knees bending over, Jake is in front of him, and he starts rubbing Jake’s thighs and licking up one of them with his tongue before he gets to his balls, which his tongue caresses lightly as his hands begin to explore Jake’s chest. He takes a deep breath before his tongue finally licks up Jake’s 6.5 inch shaft to the very tip, and he licks and canoodles it before allowing himself to start sucking his best friend’s dick. Robby’s mouth engulfs Jake’s penis, and Jake lets out a series of loud moans befitting a boy who’s getting a spectacular blowjob from a boy with an expert tongue. Robby continues to suck, and he lets his left hand fondle Jake’s tight balls while the right hand rubs up and down Jake’s hairless and creamy thigh. Robby starts sucking faster, and Jake pumps his cock upward into Robby’s open mouth as he sucks, letting his lips and tongue fully suck Jake’s beautiful dick. Robby’s cock remains hard through all this, and Jake starts moaning out Robby’s name in lieu of Sara’s.
Robby likes this and he starts to deep throat Jake, letting his fingers explore his pubes as he manages to suck around 4 inches of Jake’s cock at a time. Finally he manages 5 inches at once, and Jake lets out a huge moan as Robby lets it rub against the roof of his mouth on the way out. Jake leans forward and jumps on top of Robby, pushing him back into the same position he was just in. Robby fondles Jake’s smooth back with his hands as Jake lies on top of him, and he rubs Jake’s soft, white, and hairless butt cheeks, loving how smooth they feel. Jake licks down Robby’s body, first his neck, then his hard nipples, then his abs, and finally to the shaft of his 7.5 inch throbbing cock. Jake has a bit of trouble because Robby is so big, but he manages to start sucking his dick with a great rhythm, in and out, in and out. Robby moans Sara’s name still, and his legs shake and stammer slightly as Jake blows his big penis. Robby can’t contain himself, he know he cant, his best friend is blowing him and a picture of the girl of his dreams naked is three feet in front of him. He keeps moaning, louder now, caressing Jake’s silky smooth hair. Jake’s legs are rubbing against Robby’s legs, each hair touching and adding to the overwhelming feelings of attraction the boys feel for each other. Jake continues to suck Robby’s cock, letting the head rub against his lips and augmenting Robby’s pleasure by jerking him off with his free hand as he sucks. Jake sucks at a furious pace, and Robby’s legs are really shaking now, it’s obvious he’s close to cumming. He lets Jake know by rubbing his cheek with his hand and smiling, and Jake gets the hint. Jake’s tongue slobbers all over Robby’s 7.5 inch cock, the pre-cum oozes out, and Jake licks it off expertly.
It’s finally that time. Robby’s body shakes and he screams out “oh Sara, Sara, Sara drink my cum, oh Sara!!!” The first blast of cum rockets into Jake’s mouth, and he swallows it quickly while his hands rest of Robby’s cock and balls. He keeps sucking, and the next blast spurts into his mouth and he swallows it again. The third load of Robby’s warm cum shoots out of his dick and Jake let’s some dribble down his chin back onto Robby’ dick. Jake sucks Robby’s cock until he finally finishes cumming, and he cleans off his dick with a few expert licks. Robby’s cock starts to fall limp, and Jake collapses into his best friends arms. Jake and Robby kiss each other on the lips tenderly, and Robby holds Jake in his arms as both boys feel absolutely content with themselves and their friendship.



I’m really looking for some feedback on this story. Any compliments, critiques, or criticisms would be really appreciated, especially related to specific parts of the story you liked and disliked.

 

Anyone?

 

Very good story, but next time, not so drawn out, and try to put it on paragraphs, it was diffucult to read

 

I liked it until the boys were kissing at the end. But two male friends getting it on 'cause they're horny is always a fun read.

 

Well it's in paragraps....

message me if you want to read more.

 

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Thanks

 

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Lets here some more

 

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I thought the story was very good. It was very long though. I, unlike some of your other readers, liked it when the main characters kissed at the end. It might not have been consistent with the story, but it planted a seed for future stories with these characters. It was sexy, though and gripping.