Im over the situation now and I feel comfortable sharing with you the story of me and my friends being captured. I will do this in parts so I will update it from time to time, now with that being said lets begin.

Chapter 1

We had just finished filling up the bus seats with students and were ready to set sail on our honor roll trip. My mother was in charge of taking us there and looking after us. She did her last name check before we set out. We got about 15 miles out before we arrived at a deserted looking town when all of a sudden a black figure appeared in the road. Mother hit the brakes as hard as she could and stopped just in time. The man stared at us for about a minute and walked off. We tried to continue but about 50 meters later re ran out of fuel. Mother had recently just topped up the bus so we couldn't have run out. She found that the pump had been cut. We had to get out and push the bush to the towns petrol station. "stay here" mother said as she went into the station. We waited outside for a long time and she never came back so as we were just about to search for her we felt a net drop on us. I thought we could lift it like in the movies but to no avail I was paralysed I squirmed and squirmed until I felt a needle in my arm. I blacked out!

To be continued in chapter 2...

 

hmmmm

 

Does it have to?

 

Ok I don't like to be critical but first off when someone says it's 100% true in the title I asume it's not.

Second off your one paragraph would lead me to believe that none of this ever happened re-enfocing point number one that it's fake.

I see a lot of story with no details here. I think if you can take a step back and take your time to tell it you have the makings of a good story here. It took me a long time to learn that lesson.

Slow down and have fun with your writing, you don't have to explaine everything in the first paragraph or first page. Let it flow and you might have something really worth reading.

Good luck.

 

90 percent of this is 50 percent true?

 

So 45% ???

 

Hard to figure.

 

One paragraph

In one paragraph i can tell you the story of how i was raped by one man and moleted by another . And it is all true . You cant say just because its one paragraph its not true . If you felt it to be fake by the title you shouldnt have opened nor read the thread .

 

expressing could be good

 

Your right Dream, I could have passed it up but I was giving the writer the benifit of the doubt to begin with. As far as if it's true or not your right on that as well I wasn't there and I forget about all those group net captures and mass druggings I hear about on the news.

To the Writer its like I said before I see the makings of a really good story here and would like to see where you take it next, my only real thought on it is to try to streach it out and add in somemore detail.

 

I hav to both agree and disagree with you on this. I agree that the story screams fake but I have to disagree with your saying it has the makings of being a good story. It just sucked and Youngbi needs to start over. There's no way this happened and by calling it a true story it makes me regret waisting my time.

 

How true or false doesn't matter anymore due to violation of XnXX 's TOS.

Member has been banned !

 

I think you should quit while you are ahead! I doubt anyone will come back to your story!