When i left school at almost 16, my math score was highest in my class in the 85-90% success range, but English was 40-45% and sliding downwards, never had interest in English as all my English teachers snubbed me for not being the race they liked. Maths, Phys Ed., History were my good classes the rest were pfft, if u know what i mean.

 

TS,

[Begin Pedant Mode]

Commas, periods and semi-colons are all versions of stops
Periods are used between sentences. You should see a subject and a verb in each sentence as in this pair here.
Commas are used to separate phrases from the sentence or to separate items in a list, never to separate sentences. Notice in that sentence that the last portion does not have a subject; the subject is included in the first part of the phrase instead of in the SUBORDINATE phrase.
If you check the last sentence, above, you will see that there are two closely related sentences separated by that semi-colon. ANYPLACE that a semi-colon can be used, a period can be substituted. If a comma can be used then a semi-colon cannot.

Please note that the use of commas to separate phrases which contain both a subject and a verb - independent sentences, each - creates what is called a run-on sentence which is the bane of composition instructors in every corner of the world who teach English.

[End Pedant Mode]

I hope that I was able to give you instruction which could be understood; I apologize if I was unable to explain in a way that you could learn from. Good luck in the future. I hope you continue to write and hope to be able to read those works when you set them for viewing.

 

Different perspective, but yes I do understand. My major successes are history, english and the arts and sciences.

Growing up, my world of experience in being taught was in America and in India. My folks made sure I had the best tutors they could afford, yet in the end, it was my American grandparents who taught me the most - and the rest has been mostly of self studies.

I love to read, my collection of books is not extensive as it once was; but some of them are over a century in age.

Mama used to go nuts when she would come home and see the latest interest in history of mine lying out on the living room floor - I tended to actually build items from whatever portion of history I was interested in at the time.

Imagine the look on her face when I was eight, measuring the room to build a replica mammoth skeleton...and trying to figure out how much of the walls and roof I would have to remove to get the life size skeleton to fit...

God I do miss her.

 

Yep...
my house hold wasn't as rosy as u could pick up my stories, mum and dad fought and seperated, not long after dad threw me out. Mum was an alcoholic by then, dad i really dont know what dad was up too. As he never came home much, working overtime. It was much better growing up then when i was in my teens. School took a back seat for me.

All of sudden XNXX is getting like school, who was good at English can tease or put down; who is not. I will try but if after i try these people continue ranting; well they can go and you know what.

cheers

 

If you are going to post your stories on a public forum, you should expect feedback from the readers, particularly in an event like CAW.

I don't believe I "slammed" you, as I pointed out what I perceived as your strengths as well as your shortcomings. I gave some specific examples of errors, and suggested some resources that might help you strengthen your skills.

When I saw your comment about retreating from CAW, I posted again, hoping to encourage you by pointing out that your writing has improved from past efforts and will continue to do so over time.

But you refer to anything less than praise as "causing you heat" or "copping you heat", or "jumping on you" or "ranting". That's a really negative attitude and it makes me regret having wasted my time in trying to offer meaningful guidance. If I thought your writing was utter crap, I wouldn't have bothered to take the time to make suggestions.

You said that people here "never really help", yet you tossed aside a perfectly good suggestion of 2 excellent reference books because you can't be bothered "reading shit to help me write better".

That "shit" was written by professionals and millions of copies of those books were sold. You then go on to tell ME to post all of the mistakes in your story and the corrections. What makes you think I will do a better job explaining it than the professionals? And why do you expect ME to spend hours editing your work when you have responded so negatively to my previous suggestions?

The funny thing is, I actually wouldn't have minded helping you with that if you had a better attitude and showed a willingness to learn. At this point, though, I think you are less concerned with having better writing skills than you are with having people say nice things about your writing. I guess it's just unfortunate that I didn't post something trite like "nice story" instead of trying to offer productive comments. But now I know better.

Do you think posting on another site will get you heaps of praise and that everyone will simply overlook your errors? Well, go ahead and give it a shot, but how will it make you a better writer if you never learn where your mistakes are?

You can choose to accept feedback in the spirit in which it was offered, or you can continue to ignore it when it's not what you want to hear. If you are happy with the level at which you write, then nothing I say should matter to you at all. Your choice does not affect my world in the least, so I wish you well, but I won't spend any more time on this.

Edit, as we posted at the same time:
Again, you seem to think that comments intended to help you are trying to "put you down", so, again, I suggest you try to realize that sometimes people point out problems to help you fix them. Didn't you ever have a friend tell you that you had food in your teeth or that your socks didn't match? Try to think of it like that. What you don't know, you can't fix.

 

TwistedSister - cheers. May your future have much happiness and joy in it.

 

I am just frustrated, i been getting PM and posts here about, I should do this i should do that, u should read this, u should do it that way, when after close to ten different people start doing that, u start building walls of resistance or feel like WTF. I know most people try to help, but my pee brain is struggling with it. I hope that editor who contacted me can help, my main editor Wimmers left XNXX ages ago. Maybe i am just tired and the comments feel like critisim. Dont judge this story because of my poor grammar judge my Jessinta stories were i took time to write, not an hour or two.

Who said English was easy, Math is a piece of piss compared to English.
It maybe the language i speak but it might as well be Chinese some days.

Thanks to those who tried to help me.

 

This was short and hard hitting. A very good effort!!!

Someone said early that you lived up to your name on this one and I agree completely

I understand your writing frustration completely. Finding a good editor/proof reader/adviser can very hard.

I think you have wonderful imagination and potential I look forward to reading more from you... please do not stop writing or even let that idea cross your mind. You are smart and talented and creative. Everything we want to have our writing become happens in time... you have the ideas and the ability. I think you have shown that

Thank you for writing this

 

Thanks Jade and Silent for the encouragement.
I have finished another chapter of Jessinta and I hope you guys/gals can check it out, once I post it.

Thanks to the others on pointing out my faults.

 

Holy hell, even I crossed my legs at the opening!

This was extremely violent - not my cup of tea, but your use of different beings was very creative. Keep writing.

 

Ejls - the story is truly different, and in its own right that is what makes it a leg crossing (among men add face cringing in terror) phenomena and gem as well.

Twisted Sister is one author I intend to follow the stories of for as long as she continues to write them.

Twisted - English is the most difficult language in the world to learn, I think most Americans forget this due to us growing up with it. I have been trying to learn spanish for four years now and am only competent to a small degree in it.

Your one comment gave reference to a pea; the pea plant grows into an abundantly producing harvest given enough time to grow - and the talent your stories show confirm you are a true artist in the making.

Write the stories the way you wish to do them. Everyone is a master of their art in their own way.

 

After a few hours sleep I realize that too, people will also have a point of view, whether right or wrong; and I am not going to distract myself at the task at hand. That is to my fans/viewers to post my stories; if you dont like the way i write them; then read some one elses. Simple as that, i do have fans that dont judge me on a A+ or C- or an F for my essay, but here to read stories for fun. FUN is the main word, we are all here for FUN. I may not write in every CAW from now on, but if a senerio seems right and tickle my fancy, i may.
Thanks Ejls, Snow, Silent for your encouragement and those else i missed

 

EJLS...i spent most of my teens in violence, so hence my violent but friendly stories.

 

geez, imaginative, but great visuals

 

Thanks

 

** sign **

I can relate to what you're going through, in a way.

In school, I sucked at phys. ed. I was the most uncoordinated kid in my class. Some of the "jocks" made fun of me, which of course made me feel bd. Even my friends weren't that much help. Some of them suggested exercises or things they thought I could do to improve, but they themselves never took the time to help me.

A proofreader/editor/adviser is exactly what you need. I don't have any idea who your "friends" or contacts are on here, but if none of them seems like they could assist you, start a new thread in this forum asking for someone to help. Screen your responses, of course.

What you're doing IS very worthy of being read. Don't give up. I'm sorry to hear you don't feel like you belong here. I don't think that's the impression anyone wanted to give.

If that's what you're thinking, you're wrong.

Now, there's a criticism. :excited:

 

Currently my next work is being proofread by a Rugter5, once upon a time my works were looked at by a Wimmers when i first arrived, but he quit the site a year or so ago. I was ok at phys ed but i got harrassed doing it too

 

Crazy ass story...it does have potential and I love the creativity. Keep up the good work ^_^

 

Thanks

 

Twisted Sister - in Phys ed class I could never get anythign coordinated, too much pressure and demand from the teachers and coaches, as did many of my classmates.

I think (my opinion only here) that most of us had problems with some part/all of phys ed.

I never could figure it out - in class nothing went right yet away from school, I used to climb trees, rocks, etc with no problem. Though I will admit, back in India you had to be careful with some areas of the rivers and ponds - garials (gators) tended to be 'somewhat problematic' not to mention the occasional cobra.