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Wow, I need to come to the gym more. That’s what I was thinking as I walked back to the locker room after my workout. I’m trying to get back into shape for rugby season. Over the break I had gained a few pounds, and started smoking a few to many cigarettes, so I obviously wasn’t in the best shape of my young life.
A little about me before I continue: I’m 18 years old, about 6’1”, 180 lbs. I’ve got short brown hair and a fairly decent body, graced with a 7” cock that I’m quite proud of.
Back in the locker room I was getting ready for my traditional steam room cool down, where I would just sit in the steam room, and chill until I was ready to go home.
“Good, the locker room is almost empty” I thought to myself as I strip my shirt, shorts and boxers off. I grab my towel and head to the steam room. As I approach the door, I see one other guy in there, so I figured there was no real need to cover myself up, I mean, what’s the worst that could happen? One dude sees my cock, no big deal.
I take a seat on the first level of benches, one below the guy in there, and start to doze off. Suddenly I’m jarred back into consciousness by the voice of this stranger saying “a little excited there buddy?”
Dazed and confused I realized he was taking to me, and referring to my hardening penis.
“Wow, I’m sorry dude” was all I managed to stumble out as I reached for my towel hanging on the wall. Then, he suddenly stopped me
“Don’t be sorry, it’s not like I mind or anything” he said to me. It seemed almost instantaneous that at that moment I noticed his, huge, throbbing hard on. I must have gasped a bit, because he let out a sigh of relief.
“So, this is kinda strange to ask, but…” he started “you ever suck a cock or taste cum?”
I was shocked by the frankness of this statement, and quickly replied “no way dude, you think I’m gay or something” he must have known I was lying. I had never actually sucked a cock, but I had thought about it many times, often blasting my own load all over my face, licking every drop up I could.
He stood up, the benches putting his dick level with my face. I looked up at him, in his eyes, and saw an animal passion fused with the eyes of a man who is going to get his way. That turned me on. My cock went from hardening, to instantly rock hard. “Can I?” I murmured. And before getting an answer I kissed the tip of his cock. When I pulled away a bit to look at it, a string of precum hung from my lips. He grabbed the back of my head with his strong hands, and brought my face right to his dick. I opened wide and just let my instincts take over. I sucked his cock, slowly at first, taking little in. then I started to swirl my tongue over its head, and I licked it to the base, followed by me exploring his nut sack with my mouth. Moving back I wanted his entire 9” member inside of me. I started to let him in my mouth, as deep as I could. I tried my hardest go get all of it in me, but it was just too big, and my inexperience got the best of me. He saw my struggle and asked me if I wanted all of it inside of me. I tried to say yes, but that was really hard with half of his dick in my throat. He immediately pulled out of me. Ordered me to stand up and bend over. Resting my hands on the bench, I stuck my ass as high as I could in the air, closed my eyes and spread my legs. I was waiting for the sharp pain, but the first thing I felt was his tongue, probing my sweet, virgin hole.
After what felt like hours of that (but in reality was probably only a minuet) he stopped, and I felt him stand up, and grab my hips. Here it comes. The hot, hard tip of his penis was pushing against my hole, so I tried to relax. Suddenly I was overcome with intense pain, like a burning sensation from deep inside of me. I knew he was in. he started off slow, letting our juices lubricate my ass, but he got faster, and faster, until he was fucking me like I was some kind of object. Grabbing my hips, forcing me back with every thrust, I was soon in a world of pleasure I had never even imagined existed. Faster and faster he went, slowly moving one hand of his to stroke my cock while he rode me. Suddenly, without any warning, I felt his dick twitch, and explode with what felt like gallons of cum. He stood there behind me until every bit of his seed was planted deep within me. He asked if there was anything I wanted in return for him using my ass. I smiled, and said, “I want to taste cum.” He then got down on his knees, and finished off my almost complete erection, with me blowing in his mouth in a matter of seconds. When he was finished with that he stood up, and passionately kissed me, letting my entire jizz slide into my own mouth. That must have turned him on, because before I know it, he was pounding my ass a second time, and I just lost it. I threw myself back onto his cock with every thrust, wanting to feel his semen inside me again. It went on like t his forever, him fucking me, me thrusting back on him. It felt so good I blew 2 more loads without even my dick being touched. Once he had finished, he kept me bent over, cleaned all of the cum he could out of my ass with his mouth, and then deposited that into mine. As I laid there on the floor, he told me that I better start coming to the gym more, and if I want, he’ll be my “personal trainer”
What was probably a half hour later, after he left, I waddled back to my locker, got dressed, and found myself thinking “wow, I need to come to they gym more.”

 

that's hot....I loved it!

 

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where's this gym, i would love you to try this 10"

 

Nice story.

 

Pretty good, make them a little easier to read by seperating your paragraphs, it makes good reading much better.