My first story so helpful comments please.

My alarm clock went off on a Saturday morning because I forgot to turn it off. I to hit every button besides the one to turn it off. Damn it I'm up I'm up. I got up hopped in the shower and got dressed. A few minutes later my sister comes busting through my door. Haaaappppy Birrrthdaaaay little brother!!!! HOLY SHIT I FORGOT! Well since you never do anything for your birthday im taking you out. How do you like my outfit? That when I noticed how freaking hot she was. My sister always looked good but today that outfit was just over the top. My sister is 5"8 with long black hair a little past her shoulder with shout glass frame. Ltd doesent help she has the cutest face ever. She was wearing a top with no sleaves all pink accept the hello Kitty face. And a all black skirt that came up above her knees. With high socks stripes pink and white with her black boots. She seventeen and I'm just turning 14. I'm 5"6 short dark brown hair not very muscular at all. So where are we going I ask? She said out to eat, the amusement park and the movies. OK fine I said. She told me to get dressed in some better clothes. She left my room and all I could think about was what she was wearing. So I ran to the bathroom and pulled my pants down and started maltreating. Ahhh Naomi don't stop Naomi. I was Cumming within 5 minutes. I got cleaned up and changed and was off with my sister. Hey Noah she said? Yeah? What do you want for your birthday? Nothing comes to mind I said. She drove us to a buffet and we dug in. We talked for a few hours before we went to the amusment park. We went on lots of rides and played games. Bout time we left it was 9 so we made it to the movies around 10. She asked what movie so I picked a chick flick so she wouldn't be bored. Bullshit she said. Two tickets to the dead man's rising. This movie is rated r. OK I said. We sat in the backing the row with only two seats. The movie wasn't packed so somehow halfway through the movie my sister fell asleep. When she did her hand fell on my leg. I was shaking her a little to wake her but she only stired a little. Whensoever did her hand moved directly on my dick making it twitch. O wow I thought. I had to move her hand. I grabbed to move it and she ended up pushing down and it felt so good. My hormones got the best of me. I moved her hand to reach my zipper. Unzipped my shorts and pulled my dick out 7 inches. I looked at her while moviegoer hand around and she stayed sleep. I opened it up and wrapped her hand around my dick. I let out a soft moan of pleasure. Then I moved it up and down I continued losing myself forgetting where I was there a scream on the screen. She didn't wake up but it made her squeeze my dick.and when she did I came. I had to think fast clean up the mess. So I gabbed some napkins out my pocket and cleaned what I could. I moved yet hand and put it on her lap. So I looked at her and was shocked when my hand justice and grabbed her breast. It felt amazing. I was instantly hard again. This caused her to wake a d I quickly moved my hand. We watched the rest of the movie. She drove us home and when we got home she gave me a hug and said happy birthday again and went to her room. I went to my room and got on my computer and opened my journal. I talked about this girl I couldn't get out my hand and how I dreamed of being with her. Secretly it was my sister but I wouldn't dare type that out. I went to the bathroom and my sis knocked at my door and walked in. Noah u got a minute be out in a minute I said from my bathroom. I walked out and she was reading my journal. I forgot to close it. Sweet who is the lucky girl. I ran over to the computer and closed the program and said nobody. Come on who is she my sis asked? Nobody. That when I noticed she was in her panties and just the top she had on. I turned away to hide my erection. Hey you can tell me. It's no one I said. Come on tell me Noah. It was making me mad so without thinking turned to her and shouted. It's you your the girl. The one I dream to be with the one I fantasize about your her!!!!!

 

Ha well it's nice and vivid, and I like the way the story develops and the emotional ending. Being one block of text makes it hard to read and there are a LOT of mistakes in it that also tell us you didn't take much care with it. You haven't made any comments for anybody else. So...well if you want to write you should put more into it I think

 

Doesn't help your rep when you steal other peoples stories.