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  1. Sweetcreekcowgirl

    Sweetcreekcowgirl Porno Junky

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    Impossible Love

    A tenderly told tale and I enjoyed it. If I had not read your response, I would never know that English was not your first language. It is a difficult language to write, even for those of us who were raised speaking it. Good luck finding a proofreader, I could use one of them myself.
     
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  2. pineapplelovers69

    pineapplelovers69 Porno Junky

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    If English isn't your first language, that explains a lot. Formatting issues were difficult at first, but really didn't detract from the story. You did a good job combining romance and the tragedy that is war.

    Please keep writing. You have talent as a storyteller.
     
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  3. HisBabyGirl

    HisBabyGirl Always & Forever His

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    Language and format issues aside - this was a very good story. Keep on writing because I think you'll be really good one day.
     
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  4. AdrianCf

    AdrianCf Porn Surfer

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    Thank you all :oops:

    Your comments inspiring me to continue my writing,
    and as soon as I have something, you will be the first to read it :p
     
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  5. wantsomefun

    wantsomefun Storyteller and Lover In XNXX Heaven

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    You don't have to wait for a CAW. Just sayin'. ;)
     
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  6. Redlust

    Redlust Porn Star

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    Language and format issues aside this was a superb story. It is an okay story if you don't take those aside.

    Great job please keep writing.
     
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  7. Hornycountryboy

    Hornycountryboy Porn Star

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    I love this, seeing so many new writers in the CAW, is so great. The format did throw me off at first, but after a while I over looked it. What a nice story, and good luck. Hope to read more from you.
     
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  8. boblee9485

    boblee9485 Porn Surfer

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    Great job man
     
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  9. clarise

    clarise Precious princess Banned!

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    Well done.

    The only difficulty that I have with the story is that it seems to be guilty of false advertising.

    You've done a story of verboten liebe, and from the title it announces itself as such, yet in a sense the impossible lovers are never really tested.

    You mention early on that S. could be shot on sight for breaking curfew. More could be done with that.

    Presumbly T. mends, and he could return to the lines. More could be done with that, but he skulks back to his family in Dortmund.

    The whole world is at war; people are starving all around them; sacrifices and privation everywhere, yet here these two are, humping obliviously in the eye of the hurricane: they never make sacrifices-- neither for nor by each other.

    So, I liked it, but I had the feeling throughout that the plot had a gaping hole.
     
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  10. wantsomefun

    wantsomefun Storyteller and Lover In XNXX Heaven

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    Clarise is right about the "plot hole". However, you say English isn't your first language, and you haven't posted much here before. That changes everything.

    If you get someone to go over your work, you'll do well here.

    Very impressive.
     
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