Dude. Wow.

 

Is that good?

 

I think the last chapter made me squirt a little precum! Each chapter gets hotter and hotter-

 

Uh Yeh. Let ME Rephrase that. Fuck Yeah!!!

 

Write is like painting. You must check, redo some parts, clean others and be sure that the total context look good. The eye of any observant should not see imperfections. Those should be corrected before exposing the job to the public. It was something different, like opening a door to a kind of exploration. Then the curiosity die.

"Sister Frances also mentioned that Maybelle got her license recently." That is the phrase that killed the mystery, the mystique of leaving part to the imagination of the reader. With that phrase, the reader starts to calculate age and see that there are some facts that do not match. The interest to know more decayed. Is there more to see?

 

Sorry. I had to otherwise the story would have been deleted by the moderators.

 

Very Interesting Story, Well Told

FASCINATING! This is a Very Interesting story. It is well told (at least so far). It is also well written with better spelling and grammer than is too often the case. The author is using a 'minimalist' technique, and it does seem to tantalize many readers to want more. I do not much care for that technique, and I wish there was more description and longer chapters.

Despite my dislike of the very short chapters, and a wish for more detail, I will continue reading this story. I hope the author continues this story. I also hope the author will publish additional stories (with longer chapters and more detail). IMHO these brief chapters and 'teasing' by the author seeking more responces to the story coulb be very effective, however, it will likely become annoying very rapidly.

None-the-less, I am looking foward to more of this well written story!

 

This has been a public service announcement. :laughing:

 

xaxaxa good

 

Come one, where is the rest of it? Hanging out for the next part of the story

 

Once you caved in to the moral police of this site, the story died. There are far more worse stories on this site then what you started out with. I just do not understand folks that come to a fuck site and have to use morals as to what is right or wrong. There are lots of topics on this site that I don't agree with but to each his own. I do not go ranting on about reporting or deleting shit. I wish you would have stuck with your guns and wrote what you meant to write. It is folks like Jamie90 that have ruined such an outstanding erotic sex story site. This is all imaginary and just stories. I wish more folks could get that through their thick skulls.

 

That is sooo true. My story did not go the way I wanted to. It would have still had it's flair if I didn't have to modify it.